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untiltled
Contributed by
PhantomVampyress
on
Sunday, 2nd November 2003 @ 11:52:58 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Pale Sunkin
sorrowful eyes
you gaze toward me
your aim like no mercy
with cries of despair
reaching for my small soul
I see your pale sunk in eyes
looking upon me as if
I were a cancer that needed to be
devoured
You sucked out all
you could of my being
you took all you could
without thinking twice
You scarred my mind
like i was a worthless
heap of flies
What do I do now with
what i have left of me?
Copyright ©
PhantomVampyress
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2003-11-02 23:52:58]
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Re: untiltled
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Monday, 3rd November 2003 @ 02:44:34 PM AEST
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Lovely but so sad.. I liked the use of similies here...
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Re: untiltled
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by myheartsvoice on
Thursday, 22nd March 2007 @ 04:37:16 PM AEST
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What do I do now with what i have left of me?
This line is devistating Jenn. I'm reading this
and all of a sudden the end just came upon me with such an unsettling and un finished feeling. Beautiful use of words to convey your inner turmoil and lonliness.
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Re: untiltled
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by fadingaway on
Friday, 10th August 2007 @ 06:17:08 PM AEST
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| I like the way that it leaves you hanging and wanting more. Great wording. |
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