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you're beautiful when you bleed
Contributed by
Cancer
on
Friday, 7th November 2003 @ 12:53:46 AM in AEST
Topic:
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scream for me
it's what i need
(god, you're beautiful
when you bleed)
so pretty when you smile
and show you're missing teeth
arousing when you try to run
enchanting when you plead
unburied ghosts of fury
find peace
as they're beaten into your face
and every love i never had
finds warmth in your form
a suiting hell
make you believe
that you're as worthless as you feel
you'll never leave me now
i'll never show you how much i love you
you'd just use it against me
but, when you sleep
i cry for you
your pain is more real to me
than it is to you
i'm not a monster
just confused
i never wanted to be
this way towards you
i want to love you
but i need to hurt you
i can't come if you don't cry
i always take you from behind
so you can pretend i'm the dream
inside your mind
and by the time i start to hit you
you are already gone
you are already gone
but, when you sleep
i cry for you
your pain is more real to me
than it is to you
i'm not a monster
just confused
i never wanted to be
this way to you
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Cancer
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2003-11-07 00:53:46]
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Re: you're beautiful when you bleed
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by PhantomVampyress on
Friday, 7th November 2003 @ 12:55:52 AM AEST
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wow power poetry... i enjoyed it very much ... you can feel the emotion in this
good work
Peace and joy
JENNI |
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Re: you're beautiful when you bleed
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by Undeadsuperstar on
Friday, 7th November 2003 @ 01:17:56 AM AEST
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sick, man. Just good old plain sick. But, it makes me smile
JZR |
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Re: you're beautiful when you bleed
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by loopylou on
Friday, 7th November 2003 @ 10:11:34 AM AEST
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| just my opinion but i find this disturbing but i suppose poetrys about making people feel emotions after all... |
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Re: you're beautiful when you bleed
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by Zepher on
Friday, 7th November 2003 @ 10:23:44 AM AEST
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How coluld I not coment on this? It 's erotic and sickening. A perfect blend. :) Excellent write.
Nikki |
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Re: you're beautiful when you bleed
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by jaeann on
Friday, 7th November 2003 @ 08:41:40 PM AEST
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| hmmmmm hits a nerve dear friend........great write!!!!! |
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Re: you're beautiful when you bleed
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by bobotheclown on
Saturday, 8th November 2003 @ 01:13:13 AM AEST
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hey dude I love these demented writes of yours. Simply beautiful can't tell if yer being sarcastic or not.
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Re: you're beautiful when you bleed
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by ShadowDaughter on
Saturday, 8th November 2003 @ 06:30:23 PM AEST
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| Hate to be redundant-- sorry, I've seen this word way too much in comments on this site-- but this was, like all of yours, very powerful. I'm not going to waste time telling you how "awesome" this is and how "great" a poet you are, because either you know it already and don't much care that I think it or need me to restate it, or you don't know it, or refuse to believe it, in which case anything I say will make no difference . . . sorry, I'm rambling . . . not sure why exactly I'm posting this, I get the feeling that criticism would make you smile / roll your eyes, and I'm not in the mood to be amusing, and you'd spend still less time thinking about compliments. So whatever . . . . point is, I liked this. I think. It's the phrases like 'unburied ghosts of fury' that really make your writing come alive . . . I was impressed with this. |
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Re: you're beautiful when you bleed
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by sicknivesevered on
Saturday, 6th December 2003 @ 12:22:40 AM AEST
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| Love it, though I don't quite agree with the comment that its erotic. : / |
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