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finding mrs. right
Contributed by
Cancer
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Tuesday, 11th November 2003 @ 12:07:55 AM in AEST
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i want to be the one she loves, tonight
i'm going to be the last thing she sees, tonight
i'm going to prove to her my love, tonight
i am going to make her mine forever
tonight
ready to find a love of my own
i'll take her life and then my own
forever together in death's twilight
immortalize our love
tonight
i'll catch her eye
i'll smile and wink
offer to buy her a drink
if i can get her to the car
her fate will be sealed
drive her back to my place
where the knife is revealed
i hope this one will be mrs. right
can't take any disappointment tonight
don't wanna waste time with the wrong lady
i've met too may mrs. wrongs, you see
too many times my well-worn gloves
have been stained by abortions of my slit-wrist loves
too many girls who reject my love's glow
so they die alone, i don't follow
but, tonight is different
i feel it inside
tonight my throat
will be slit wide
as i find a companion
in love's suicide
i'm gonna meet the girl of my dreams
tonight
jet black hair
her eyes, bright blue
her smile reflects
a heart, so true
her tight clothes hug
her soft, pale skin
i think mrs. right
just walked in
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Re: finding mrs. right
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by twinkletoes on
Tuesday, 11th November 2003 @ 12:30:43 AM AEST
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A true poet can imagine anything and tell his or her readers about it. A true poet gets response (good or bad) from his or her work.
A true poet's work is here above.
Well done.
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Re: finding mrs. right
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by poetrygodslove on
Tuesday, 11th November 2003 @ 12:40:26 AM AEST
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| im very sorry i cant help it...but everytime i read your poetry its like im meeting the next real killer in the world the next terriost attacker..why oh why do you have to write like this..why oh why are you so blue that you can let love really shine through at the beginning i thought this was a love poem and i was caught up in it the next you might as well had said you killed me...do you get so high and so feeling great to write like this...does it turn you on...what in the world does your wife think about your poetry...and does she keep a knife under her pillow just incase you poems come alive....why...please tell me...please.....sandy |
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Re: finding mrs. right
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by Cancer on
Tuesday, 11th November 2003 @ 12:59:01 AM AEST
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i have to write like this because this is what i feel, this is what i think. if i wrote about puppies and flowers and sunshine, then it would be even more terrible than the usual drivel i spew because it would be fake. it wouldn't be from the heart, just forced from the hand. why do you write so much about god? because that is who you are. this is who i am.
no, i don't get high or turned on by what i write. i just write out of necessity, if i kept all this bottled inside, then it might turn to reality.
my wife likes what little of my work that i show her. at least she says she does, maybe she's just being nice. she's alot like me, so it doesn't scare or disturb her. she's written things just as dark or disturbing as i have.
yeah, we keep a big knife beside the bed, but not to protect us from one another, just for protection from worthless people who would rather steal than earn.
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Re: finding mrs. right
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by bobotheclown on
Tuesday, 11th November 2003 @ 01:36:43 AM AEST
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heh man good poem felt as if I was there inside the killer's mind. I can relate to yer reply a lot good words. I can't keep it bottled up inside either. An awesome write as always.
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Re: finding mrs. right
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 11th November 2003 @ 02:24:35 AM AEST
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| This poem was really amazing you must have a great imagination. I read what sandy wrote, sandy just to let you know this , just becuase he writes this way doesnt mean he is depressed or a killer by far some peopel just write like this, look at edgar allen poe he was dark did he kill anyone no why do people think just becuase a poem isnt happy they are depressed?/ Ithought this was good lots of feeling in it |
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Re: finding mrs. right
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by poetrygodslove on
Tuesday, 11th November 2003 @ 06:04:57 AM AEST
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| well my friend, thanks for your reply.I understand I so feel that one writes from the heart.YOUR A BEAUTIFUL POET JUST BEAUTIFUL how you can form it and rhyme it and it flows so beautiful in fact if there was ever a trophy to win you surely would get it..but the reason I say the things I do.is because your poetry reminds me so much of my childhood.it frightens me.I hated my dad.he was the devil in the flesh.He scared me.he hurt my mom and us if we didnt watch him hurt her.IT took the GOD you dont know or dont care to know or whatever since I think deeply you do but cant trust him.It took this god to change my dad from being dark to love.when I got to know this god alittle more and that is just a tiny I found that I started loving others and forgiving my dad.there is no hate in me.there is no desire drive to talk of anything of evil..hurting anyone...but lately I have been able to write somethings down about my childhood and you know what I feel when I do...SCARED.scared that my dad somehow will find this website and read it and realize what he done to me...now I know he changed I know it took this god to change him no other thing could had.but I know if he reads it,it might hurt him...but reading your reply to my comment made me realize one thing and that is.....your no different then me.you write from your heart.what you know.I wish tho..I was your mom where I could had raised you with alot of love and understanding and been there for you.I wish that I was the dad who could had been there for you and played games with you and guided you...SEE i see differently and I am sometimes wrong lol but to be loved and all loved that is alllllllllllll you know....and love poetry would only flow.but to be hurt and mad all you can ever write cause that is all you know and feel....you see ? you can take sourness from a jar of freash honey...you cant pick all the flowers in the world and find they smell bad.....anyways like I have been reading in the forum lately...my two cents worth...and IM sorry FOR judging you but I know one thing...YOUR AND EDGAR ALLEN POE WHEN IT COMES TO WRITING....HAVE to find out my home address so you can send me a copy of your book of poetry cause i know you should be famous one day hehehe...BUT wondering how one poem of love would come from you.....you should write me one poem...one poem..of your beautiful family ....I WILL NEVER NEVER BOTHER YOU AGAIN LOL......cant find any bad words in that now could you or could you ....knowing you now..YEP....try....sandy |
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Re: finding mrs. right
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by Cancer on
Tuesday, 11th November 2003 @ 07:19:09 PM AEST
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"wondering how one poem of love would come from you"
a love poem? actually, i have several love scrawls on this site already.
"the game", "i miss her", "you're beautiful when you bleed", "sad but true pt. 2 (the real love song)", alive in the arms of the dead", "new beginnings", "her eyes are crystals", "to my Goddess", "simply sick", "love poem,...sort of", "stephanie", and "what dreams may come" are my love scrawls. if you're still wondering what a love poem from me would sound like, they are all on this site.
thanks for your comments.
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