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Free
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tammie
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Wednesday, 12th November 2003 @ 05:32:47 PM in AEST
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Free By Christina Arceri She longed to be a bird and fly far far away She felt bad for every blade of grass for planted they would stay She longed to be free from what she felt were puppet strings She was tired of everything being decided for her day after day She longed to a mermaid and swim out to sea She longed to be free from what she felt were puppetstrings She longed to be a shooting star sailing through the sky She longed to climb over the mountains and run far away She pitied every flower put in a vase for there they would stay She longed to be a cloud and float away She longed to be the wind blowing through the trees She longed to be free from what she felt were puppetstrings She felt bad for every seashell washed upon the shore for on the shore they will stay She longed to be an autumn leaf descending from the trees She longed to be free from what she felt were puppetstings She longed to be a flower blowing in the wind She longed to be a butterfly soaring through the sky She longed to be a snowflake falling from the heavens People say she must have longed long enough Because they woke one day and she was gone!
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Re: Free
(User Rating: 1 ) by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Wednesday, 12th November 2003 @ 09:19:57 PM AEST (User
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Wow!! I loved this... Every line was beautiful, but I especially loved this one..
"She felt bad for every blade of grass for planted they would stay"
Jenni
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Re: Free
(User Rating: 0 ) by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 12th November 2003 @ 09:23:38 PM AEST (User
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The beginning was great, but about midway through it began to feel forced. Your point came across loud and clear though. |
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