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Under Shorts
Contributed by
MarcoTheFish
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Monday, 24th November 2003 @ 03:24:46 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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lower this grave gets
as i dig forward today
higher on your pedestool
you're a fool
in your pool
of happiness
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it's so cold outside
i don't have the warmth
of your body
anymore
on such a blistering day
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hatred enveloping the love
of our obsessed lives
repeating everything
that kept us famous
in each other's minds
Copyright ©
MarcoTheFish
... [
2003-11-24 15:24:46]
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Re: Under Shorts
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by mckayla on
Monday, 24th November 2003 @ 03:42:57 PM AEST
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Wonderful write again!!!! I didnt let the title fool me this time!!
mckayla
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Re: Under Shorts
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by norticus on
Monday, 24th November 2003 @ 04:30:33 PM AEST
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I feel like this is about masterbation but I could be mistaken. Probably masterbation to the thought of someone that used to eliminate the need for such a practice.
I give it a 4.6 on the Nortiscale.
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Re: Under Shorts
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by faith_my_eyes on
Saturday, 24th January 2004 @ 02:25:02 PM AEST
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| Nice write. I loved the third stanza... That's precisely what happened if my last relationship. |
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