|
 Menu
|
|
|
|
|
Social
|
|
|
|
|
Spindle on the Wheel
Contributed by
eternityslyre
on
Monday, 1st December 2003 @ 05:03:35 AM in AEST
Topic:
didactic
|
Around and around!
The freelancer prances
His life has no center
Just lyrics and dances
Around and around!
The merry wheel spins
The cycle unbridled
The works of a whim
Around and around!
The bound convict gyrates
His head won't stop spinning
His mind clouded with hate
Around and around!
The unstoppapble circle
While some may not know it
Our whole life's a trifle
Around and around!
For life has no end--
And just when you're stopping
--It's starting again--
Copyright ©
eternityslyre
... [
2003-12-01 05:03:35]
(Date/Time posted on
site)
Advertisments:
|
|
|
|
|
|
Sorry, comments are no longer allowed for anonymous, please register for a free membership to access this feature and more
|
|
All comments are owned by the poster. Your Poetry
Dot Com is not responsible for the content of any
comment.
That said, if you find an offensive comment, please
contact via the FeedBack Form with details, including poem title
etc.
|
|
|
Re: Spindle on the Wheel
(User Rating: 1 )
by ToriVeigh on
Monday, 1st December 2003 @ 07:16:39 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| I guess it doesn't matter who or where we are: everyone's life progresses in the circle. Great write. |
|
|
Re: Spindle on the Wheel
(User Rating: 0 )
by Former_Member on
Monday, 1st December 2003 @ 07:34:28 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| This was okay, but you do have potential... |
|
|
Re: Spindle on the Wheel
(User Rating: 1 )
by Avarice_Riot on
Monday, 1st December 2003 @ 07:37:12 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| Interesting subject. The imagery is nice too. |
|
|
Re: Spindle on the Wheel
(User Rating: 1 )
by EternitysLyre on
Monday, 1st December 2003 @ 08:04:14 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| Well, it's an old poem. What can i say? If you want to say if i have potential or not (which i still firmly claim i don't, mind you) then go read my other works. |
|
|
Re: Spindle on the Wheel
(User Rating: 1 )
by Wrybod on
Thursday, 4th December 2003 @ 11:40:01 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
grreat write ,such a a superb lilt ....
But why not
............................spins
..the cycle unnbridled
the product of sins.
...........................
The convict gyrates
...............................
his mind filled with hates
the unstoppable cycle
...................................
.............................trifle
..................................
no end to the pain
.......................................
..........................again
I know, Iknow, mind my own business.
It's just that it goes around and around so well I couldn't keep myself from meddling
bob
|
|
|
Re: Spindle on the Wheel
(User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on
Thursday, 19th August 2004 @ 03:08:41 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
I caught this upon a sojourn into the annals of this site's A-Z archive. I loved the cadence of the first few stanzas;
"His life has no center
Just lyrics and dances"
That's just plain good entertainment.
Apperception flows from this. I like it a lot. |
|
|
|
· 
Poetry
Community
Members
Areas
Reference
Search
Top
Others
