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When You Wish Upon A Star
Contributed by
sarah_may
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Friday, 5th December 2003 @ 01:51:25 AM in AEST
Topic:
DreamsandWishes
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Star bright, star light,
First star I see tonight,
I wish I may,
I wish I might,
I wish my wish come true tonight
A short little poem that I have said,
I found it long ago in a book I read.
I say it when it gets dark at night,
When I see that first stars twinkling light.
I used to wish for lots of little things:
A puppy, a game, and a necklace with rings.
Most of those things Ive probably gotten;
And those same things are most likely long forgotten.
And tonight as I look up into the sky,
Ill see that first star, gazing down from on high.
And Ill wish something that Ive never wished for before;
If this one wish is granted, I wont ask for anything more.
I wish that one day, I might feel a bit better,
Cause Im sick and tired of being under the weather.
Even if it lasts for only one day,
There is no price Im not willing to pay.
Just to feel like I used to, so long ago,
Not felling this immense pain of inner sorrow.
To feel carefree, like that girl in my past,
When life was so easy, I wished it would last.
I just want one final star, to wish upon,
After this last star, I hope my pains gone.
So this is what I ask as I stand at the window sill,
My one last wish, granting it is your will.
Star bright, star light,
First star I see tonight,
I wish I may,
I wish I might,
I wish one day Ill be all right
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Re: When You Wish Upon A Star
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by Wrybod on
Friday, 5th December 2003 @ 03:14:59 AM AEST
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Words from a Disney song......
"When you wish upon a star
makes no difference who you are
everything you heart desires
will soon come true"
I may not have remembered it quite correctly but I hope it does for you, sarah-may
I live with a few more aches pains and disabilities as I get near entering my ninth decade but within those restrictions........... this site ....my model railway..... and my lovely wife..... give me all I could ask for to make life worth living.
I hope you can make a similar haven and that your pain eases enough for you to enjoy it
bob |
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Re: When You Wish Upon A Star
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by EternitysLyre on
Friday, 5th December 2003 @ 04:33:47 AM AEST
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THe last stanza is an excellent application of the original lines.
As for the rest, I can't tell if you were shooting for meter, and the rhyme is quite good. You should do better, and try for impossible rhymes. It makes the composition seem that much more satisfying upon completion.
"Pale moons and sleepless nights; Ideals torn in dark delight."
~Eternity's Lyre |
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Re: When You Wish Upon A Star
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by Cobalt on
Friday, 5th December 2003 @ 09:47:09 AM AEST
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| I think this was very well written and I fully enjoyed reading it. |
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Re: When You Wish Upon A Star
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by harshreality on
Friday, 5th December 2003 @ 02:48:21 PM AEST
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| beautiful. I understand exactly how you feel. I even have a poem quite similiar. Its called I wish I may I wish I might. You should read it. You'd probably like it. |
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Re: When You Wish Upon A Star
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by Kalika on
Friday, 5th December 2003 @ 05:06:04 PM AEST
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I can uunderstand very well how u must feel. I sincerely hope that you get better. lovely poem.
Kali |
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Re: When You Wish Upon A Star
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by positivelypurple on
Saturday, 6th December 2003 @ 05:25:37 AM AEST
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| Very touching...thank you for sharing. |
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