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Farther Away
Contributed by
Rachel
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Sunday, 7th December 2003 @ 06:55:38 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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Im drifting farther away
From all Ive ever known
I feel so lost and lonely
Not letting my feelings show
Im scared out of my mind
Dont know which way to go
Cant be glimpsed or spotted
So for now Ill lay low
But I want out of this darkness
Because its making my weak
The dark air engulfs me completely
Its like the sky has sprung a leak
Please get me out of this hole
Bring my too the empty air
Away from bleak surroundings
And away from strangerss empty stares
At least help me to escape
Then if you want Ill care for myself
Forget about these feelings
And put this night upon a shelf
I promise Im fine
Or at least I will be soon
But still I want your arms around me
Here beneath the melting moon
Copyright ©
Rachel
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2003-12-07 18:55:38]
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Re: Farther Away
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by lovingcritters on
Sunday, 7th December 2003 @ 11:22:07 PM AEST
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Very heartbreaking and soulful write.
I felt all your emotions and finally the night
Darkness closing in on you.
Was it a depression that I view?
I loved your ending, made your whole poem
We say we are fine, but we are not.
Having his arms around you will help alot!
I liked this poem very much!
lovingcritters
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Re: Farther Away
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by emystar on
Monday, 8th December 2003 @ 12:54:49 AM AEST
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Sad but written very well.
Hope all is well by now.
peace, joy, luv,
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Re: Farther Away
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by Jeff9Man on
Saturday, 13th December 2003 @ 11:00:36 PM AEST
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we all need rescuing some time. I have never been able to decide what would be scarier, to be rescued and then return to the black. or to never be rescued, and just get used to the darkness. either way, very good poem.
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