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Depressed
Contributed by
NikkiMNelson
on
Sunday, 7th December 2003 @ 07:29:44 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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I cry evertime I see you You look as though your torn apart I wish to god there was something i could do Maybe try and mend your broken heart
You look ragged and hurt It kills me to see you so sad I hope to see you happy again Then maybe the pain won't be so bad
I saw you shed tears that become flooding I watched you, your pain becoming mine Where each step is the hardest thing to manage In a world where nothing is fine
Today I saw you buy a knife I wondered 'are you about to take your life?' I ran to you, watched you through blurry eyelids As you took your life and tore it into bits
Now as they lay you in your final resting place I stare as you begin to lower in the ground Knowing i will never again see your face Feeling as though my soul will never be found!!
Copyright ©
NikkiMNelson
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2003-12-07 19:29:44] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Depressed
(User Rating: 1 ) by PhantomVampyress on
Sunday, 7th December 2003 @ 07:49:31 PM AEST (User
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wow very emotional poem.. I like this one alot
peace and joy
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Re: Depressed
(User Rating: 1 ) by bobotheclown on
Sunday, 7th December 2003 @ 09:53:02 PM AEST (User
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I liked this although the last stanza seemed a bit forced I thought... the rest was a masterpiece though...
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Re: Depressed
(User Rating: 1 ) by secretwind on
Sunday, 7th December 2003 @ 10:12:51 PM AEST (User
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nice write. |
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Re: Depressed
(User Rating: 1 ) by LovingWhispers on
Monday, 8th December 2003 @ 12:51:57 AM AEST (User
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wow...deep write.Hope its fictional.
Great work!
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Re: Depressed
(User Rating: 1 ) by Cobalt on
Monday, 8th December 2003 @ 06:47:18 PM AEST (User
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This was a really good write. I liked it so much. |
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