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Goodbye
Contributed by
Cora-Windover
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Sunday, 7th December 2003 @ 10:07:15 PM in AEST
Topic:
goodbyepoetry
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Say goodbye and let me leave
To break your holding over me
This burden I have beared too long
This silver chain, this twisted song
Say goodbye and let me go
Alone with footprints in the snow
My one remaining memory
This silver chain, this melody
Say goodbye and I'll be gone
It's time for me to move along
You never gave me room to cry
This silver chain, this lullabye
To leave or stay, to go or lie?
So much of life has passed me by
My friends were right this final time
I'm still unique, the choice is mine
Say goodbye and let me leave
No more are you a part of me
This burden was too much to take
So say goodbye, and let me break.
Copyright ©
Cora-Windover
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2003-12-07 22:07:15]
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Re: Goodbye
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by lovingcritters on
Sunday, 7th December 2003 @ 10:57:35 PM AEST
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Wow, Cora...I thought this was an amazing poem song....it really said what you wanted to make him understand...you no longer were in his grasp....no longer could he make it last! I loved the words you used in this poem, and they all perfectly rhymed. This was a good poem, Cora. Lots of talent dear
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Re: Goodbye
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by shelby on
Sunday, 7th December 2003 @ 11:19:25 PM AEST
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beautiful
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Re: Goodbye
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by positivelypurple on
Sunday, 7th December 2003 @ 11:47:22 PM AEST
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Very beautiful Cora. This one touched my heart because I recently said goodbye to someone. Keep on writing.
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Re: Goodbye
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by emystar on
Monday, 8th December 2003 @ 12:23:07 AM AEST
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Very good work altho sad.
Hang tuff.
I know the feelings well but sometimes ya jus gotta think of yourself and what's best for u.
peace, joy, luv, huggs,
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Re: Goodbye
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by LovingWhispers on
Monday, 8th December 2003 @ 12:39:23 AM AEST
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Great way of saying it.
Very creative
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Re: Goodbye
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by Vickie on
Wednesday, 21st April 2004 @ 12:40:32 AM AEST
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| good write!! you seemed to say all the things I've been feeling lately. im leaving soon... |
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Re: Goodbye
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by OctoberRain on
Sunday, 28th October 2007 @ 07:07:13 AM AEST
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i love the way u made it rhyme perfectly and got the message across. i love it!
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Re: Goodbye
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by manbeast on
Saturday, 9th January 2010 @ 08:34:34 AM AEST
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| Nice work, I like the way the poem flows. Also like the repeated link between the chain and the music reference. |
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