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Bitter Shower
Contributed by
LovingWhispers
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Friday, 12th December 2003 @ 08:03:14 AM in AEST
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Cast your venomous spit,let the poison fall at will
Base your attack on blankness,I hope your heart this does fulfill
For when the truth is found and the wind is high in place
May it change in its direction and land the spit back in your face
To you,the friend I used to know,where do you go inside
When you have failed at being a man,damn where is your pride
I am not the least bit down,I have travelled way past hurt
Seeing your true colours,the words that taste like dirt
Take care of your heart,I hope it finds a resting place
And may the bitter winds of winter,blow the spit back in your face
Copyright ©
LovingWhispers
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Re: Bitter Shower
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by Ilhar on
Friday, 12th December 2003 @ 09:58:01 AM AEST
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well written venting
Shari |
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Re: Bitter Shower
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by Cobalt on
Friday, 12th December 2003 @ 10:15:50 AM AEST
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| Wow... I hope you and everything are ok... I really do. Somehow you had all that anger and still wrote it well though... |
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Re: Bitter Shower
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by loopylou on
Friday, 12th December 2003 @ 10:38:46 AM AEST
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| ow ouch wouldnt like to be the gut your mad with lol.....good write you expressed yourself very well |
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Re: Bitter Shower
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by shelby on
Friday, 12th December 2003 @ 02:28:58 PM AEST
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way to tell them stick to your guns great jon!
michelle |
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Re: Bitter Shower
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Friday, 12th December 2003 @ 02:29:10 PM AEST
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Ouch!!!!
Jenni |
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Re: Bitter Shower
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 20th December 2003 @ 05:54:33 AM AEST
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| I hope everythings okay with you. I haven't been here for ages now, so busy with moving and work and studies. But I'll tell you what, I have missed your poems so much. They always calmed me and warmed me. Well, now that I'm all moved in and have work and studies under control, you'll see a few more poems from me! And a few more comments on your amazing poems!! I do hope everything is okay with you though and if you need to talk then drop me a message :-) |
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Re: Bitter Shower
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by Menelaus on
Wednesday, 31st December 2003 @ 11:13:11 AM AEST
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That's a very stinging rebuke.
Still....more, please. |
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Re: Bitter Shower
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 20th January 2004 @ 11:36:29 PM AEST
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*Wiping the spit off my face* ;-) Well written... and very intense. I really felt the emotion, and in this case, I'm not sure if that's a good thing or a bad thing. Keep up the great writing.
P.G. ;-) |
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Re: Bitter Shower
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by bernard on
Thursday, 11th March 2004 @ 12:47:42 PM AEST
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blow the spit back in your face. What a rebuke for the man that got on the wrong side of you. Good strong poem. Very expressive keep em coming have a great life from bernard
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