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The Star The Broke The Sky
Contributed by
Exodus-On-Life
on
Wednesday, 17th December 2003 @ 05:02:05 PM in AEST
Topic:
happypoetry
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Perspective from the rooftop
Saw this star come crashing through
So suddenly blinded
And reminded of you
Heat swells up my legs
Pupils begin to contract
Blowing up the sky of darkness
Acquiring all I used to lack
Saw this star crash on through
And squinted into the amazing light
The beauty overwhelming
The sky bleeds black tonight
Losing all my hopes for difference
Imagining you take away the pain
I'm lost in this beautiful disaster
Waiting for everything left to gain
Another page down in memory
Address this feeling to you
I love the way I feel on this rooftop
As this star comes crashing through
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Re: The Star The Broke The Sky
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by MissLee on
Wednesday, 17th December 2003 @ 05:09:46 PM AEST
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| Very nice dear, know the feeling. |
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Re: The Star The Broke The Sky
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by Putteragain on
Wednesday, 17th December 2003 @ 05:09:48 PM AEST
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i love the thought of this
very well done
michelle |
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Re: The Star The Broke The Sky
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by sicknivesevered on
Wednesday, 17th December 2003 @ 05:15:34 PM AEST
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| I very much love the title. Arg. It makes me mad that I didn't come up with it. Oh well, excellent write. |
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Re: The Star The Broke The Sky
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by Lia on
Wednesday, 17th December 2003 @ 09:38:35 PM AEST
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| This is neat..makes a person's mind work |
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Re: The Star The Broke The Sky
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by MoonlitAngel on
Wednesday, 17th December 2003 @ 09:49:38 PM AEST
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"The sky bleeds black tonight" - love that line! Thought provoking write. I love the way you worded it. Thanks for the great read!
~ Moonlit |
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Re: The Star The Broke The Sky
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by Kie on
Wednesday, 17th December 2003 @ 10:19:20 PM AEST
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Very unique, one of a kind. I loved the wording and the imagination I found while reading it.
Kie |
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