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Nails and Thorns
Contributed by
Vitreous_Soul
on
Friday, 26th December 2003 @ 06:28:49 AM in AEST
Topic:
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Destiny spins me around like a top
Pessimism tells me where it'll stop
In a dark cavern where I reside alone
Ready to give, ready to atone
Hate permeates throughout my flowing blood
My screams and my pain create tears of mud
I wish it on those fool enough to take
This nightmare from which no one can awake
Searing pain to which we are born
Innocence shredded in a cradle of thorns
Quiet agony in which we will die
A nail in the coffin each time we cry
Emotion suppressed, caged with compassion
Silent anguish without any ration
The song in my mind, a soul killing dirge
It plays and it feeds the slow killing urge
Death gives a breath of ice on my shoulder
Humanity dies, my heart grows colder
The conscience feels like needles of fire
Life-curse my spirit, wrapped in barbed wire
Searing pain to which we are born
Innocence shredded in a cradle of thorns
Quiet agony in which we will die
A nail in the coffin each time we cry
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Re: Nails and Thorns
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by Kie on
Friday, 26th December 2003 @ 07:53:19 AM AEST
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I found this deep and dark and I LOVED it...
"Life-curse my spirit, wrapped in barbed wire"
That line is stuck in my mind....A very vivid description.
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Re: Nails and Thorns
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by emystar on
Friday, 26th December 2003 @ 09:49:38 AM AEST
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Very good work of art.
peace, joy, luv,
emyy |
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Re: Nails and Thorns
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by mercedes on
Friday, 26th December 2003 @ 09:56:11 AM AEST
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| very good |
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Re: Nails and Thorns
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by ShadowDaughter on
Friday, 26th December 2003 @ 11:46:56 AM AEST
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Ooooh, I quite liked this . . .
I was going to say that I especially liked the second stanza, but then I realized that, no, it was the third stanza I liked the most. And the fifth. And the fourth. And so on . . .
Poignant and dark and beautiful. Loved the chorus-like part.
gleam and glimmer,
Nora |
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Re: Nails and Thorns
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by jaeann on
Friday, 26th December 2003 @ 04:11:53 PM AEST
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| innocence shredded in a cradle of thorns........YES!!!!! |
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Re: Nails and Thorns
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by bobotheclown on
Friday, 26th December 2003 @ 11:19:02 PM AEST
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this was awesome I can't express how much I loved this... wow this was so amazing and dark totally beautiful.
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Re: Nails and Thorns
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by Kindredblood_dragon on
Saturday, 27th December 2003 @ 05:07:00 AM AEST
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Such creativity in this, so dark, Yet I loved this poem it flows it catches the eye and fires the imagination.
Exellent work on this write so beautiful yet so sad. |
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