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in this grave, i lie alone
Contributed by
Cancer
on
Friday, 26th December 2003 @ 04:54:21 PM in AEST
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where forgotten dreams are once more recalled
where jagged memories soften when reviewed
where everything that once mattered, doesn't
in this grave, i lie alone
where helping hands may no longer reach
where careless words no longer sting
life was fumbling foreplay
in path to this tender bliss
in this grave, i lie alone
where repentance seems a hollow hobby
where night and day are much the same
the smile i'd lost finally returns
in this grave, i lie alone
you said you loved me and i believed
foolish, i thought our love was set in stone
then with no warning, your love was gone
and i was left to weep alone
and in that moment, i died alone
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Re: in this grave, i lie alone
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by emystar on
Friday, 26th December 2003 @ 07:02:38 PM AEST
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Very creative altho sad but full of truth.
Great work!
peace, joy, luv,
emy |
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Re: in this grave, i lie alone
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by SensitiveSoAbused on
Friday, 26th December 2003 @ 07:05:50 PM AEST
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i did not like it. no image.
i thrive on image
C+
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Re: in this grave, i lie alone
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by jaeann on
Friday, 26th December 2003 @ 07:30:43 PM AEST
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| life was fumbling foreplay....my my...yes!!!! |
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Re: in this grave, i lie alone
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by bobotheclown on
Friday, 26th December 2003 @ 10:25:36 PM AEST
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wow this was so sad and heartfelt I absoltely loved it.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: in this grave, i lie alone
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by PhantomVampyress on
Friday, 26th December 2003 @ 11:47:47 PM AEST
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this is a sad but very touching write.. I loved how you expressed your feelings in this about love gone.. great job
peace joy and hope
JENNA |
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Re: in this grave, i lie alone
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by Kindredblood_dragon on
Saturday, 27th December 2003 @ 05:01:35 AM AEST
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A deep sad poem, but with a meaning that holds so much truth to it.
Beautifully written as always Cancer.
I hope to read more when I am next onsite. |
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Re: in this grave, i lie alone
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by hot-shot on
Saturday, 27th December 2003 @ 02:35:51 PM AEST
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| hey man u r broken like me but it's really a grt poem ........hot-shot |
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Re: in this grave, i lie alone
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by SensitiveSoAbused on
Wednesday, 7th September 2005 @ 11:34:43 PM AEST
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I commented on this 2 years ago. i said flatly that 'i do not like it.'
well, I was just now, searching for my own email address on google for complicated reasons, and i came across this link.
Mistakenly, I thought it was a poem that I had written, and completley forgot about. (in this grave, i lie alone sounds brilliantly like something id say) so i begain to read it as if it were spawned from my own mind...
I thought to myself, GOSH i like this poem. I did a good job on this. I cannot remember this at all but gosh i sure did a super job on it.
Halfway through the poem i realized (quite sadly, and dissapointedly, actually, for i would love to take credit for it) that it was indeed not mine and quite indeed yours.
i loved the stanzas,
where forgotten dreams are once more recalled
where jagged memories soften when reviewed
where everything that once mattered, doesn't
in this grave, i lie alone
where helping hands may no longer reach
where careless words no longer sting
life was fumbling foreplay
in path to this tender bliss
in this grave, i lie alone
ESPECIALLY the lines
where jagged memories soften when reviewed
and
where careless words no longer sting
life was fumbling foreplay
in path to this tender bliss
it all sound so apathetic and despondent...
not despairing... not caring...
it feels like me and i wish i wrote it. Let's transfer ownership of this poem, Roy.
(((bathe in smoothly flowing poisons of my mind)))
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