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My Talent has Fled
Contributed by
bobotheclown
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Sunday, 28th December 2003 @ 08:06:40 PM in AEST
Topic:
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My talent has gone
And leaves behind an aching hole
That begs to be filled
The scars that litter my arms
They are dry no longer oozing
The passion I once felt
This pen is parched
And these pages are brittle and crumbling
From lack of use
My heart is scattered amongst the wind
And I lie here broken and destitute
Fingers bloodied and shaking
From the needle that tried to stitch
The pieces back together
The scars that criss-cross my legs
Are dry and I find no relief in them
The bitterness contorts my face
And works on me like acid in my stomach
I feel so empty and useless
For this road is hard and jagged
And these rhymes have fled
Leaving me lost, totally lost
The hurt in my eyes, and ringing in my ears
Cannot be alleviated
I scratch at this page,
But my pen is dry
And all talent has fled
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Re: My Talent has Fled
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by ShadowDaughter on
Sunday, 28th December 2003 @ 08:33:54 PM AEST
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*winces* Ouch. I know the feeling; I think we've all felt that way at one point. And if such a vivid, poignant, beautiful poem is stemmed from when you feel you're left talentless, I'd love to see what you could do with talent.
Hope your dry spell ends soon.
dusk and daybreak,
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Re: My Talent has Fled
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by Merry on
Sunday, 28th December 2003 @ 08:34:48 PM AEST
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i don't think your talent has fled at all ,,,,a very dark and tormented write. maybe it's the time of year, seems like a lot of folks are in a funk with writing these days. keep scartching on the paper, the muse has not deserted you my friend
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Re: My Talent has Fled
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Sunday, 28th December 2003 @ 08:45:09 PM AEST
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Ah, My Friend...I know the feeling only too well... But you have done great with this write...so you have not totally lost it like I have.. Keep plodding along...
((((((Joel)))))
Jenni |
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Re: My Talent has Fled
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by carebear on
Sunday, 28th December 2003 @ 08:57:00 PM AEST
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Joel,
Hun I realllly reallllly liked this poem it was dark,lonesome and sad I've got the scars to prove it tho that dosnt really make sence to what Im tryin to say but,i see what u were trying ot say in this poem I really enjoyed it the feeling was reallly moving n dark I think u write better then me hehe....jk maybe we should write a poem together that would b fun.Keep Writen Joel!!!
~CareBear~ |
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Re: My Talent has Fled
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by Chanti on
Monday, 29th December 2003 @ 02:13:37 AM AEST
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From the looks of this poem your talent hasnt gone anywhere Joel. Still, its sad to hear that and i hope you get around this writers block soon!!
- Chanti * |
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Re: My Talent has Fled
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by PhantomVampyress on
Monday, 29th December 2003 @ 03:55:57 PM AEST
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this is a sad but awesome write.. I feel that way too sometimes.. Im sure you just got writers block .. it will go away soon .. i get writers block myself.. hope to see more work from you
peace
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Re: My Talent has Fled
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by Ruby1987 on
Monday, 29th December 2003 @ 06:50:03 PM AEST
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Joel dis iz a gr8 write man, could it b writers block. probably i had dat, i still do.
Gr8 poem even though
From a friend
Aaliyah Ruby Ellis |
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Re: My Talent has Fled
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by Cobalt on
Tuesday, 30th December 2003 @ 03:31:22 PM AEST
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| Wow... Ouch dude. This sounds uber nasty. I hope you get over the funk... Go out and get laid... That should help. |
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Re: My Talent has Fled
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by afraid_of_fear on
Tuesday, 30th December 2003 @ 03:46:24 PM AEST
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Joel your talent will never leave you, if you can write like this. Don't give up on your writing, try and give it time and it'll come back to you! I love the last couple of lines in each stanza, brilliant : )
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Re: My Talent has Fled
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by Menelaus on
Sunday, 4th January 2004 @ 03:04:14 AM AEST
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| Thus, you have not let me down. You indeed are an inspiration to us all, if you can produce works of this millieu. |
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Re: My Talent has Fled
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by persia on
Wednesday, 10th March 2004 @ 01:58:36 PM AEST
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Dis one is so good. Ur anger is expressed well.
Talent is a fatal thing.
persia |
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