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Whisper
Contributed by
Chanti
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Thursday, 8th January 2004 @ 02:03:09 AM in AEST
Topic:
AngryPoetry
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Though ive tried to force the words,
not a sentence has come out,
inside i was losing control,
wasting away without a doubt,
And you, you couldnt hear me,
too wrapped up in yourself,
and all i did was listen,
all my life, listening to someone else,
Always living out a dream,
without a real goal,
your greed feeding my fire,
to fill an empty hole,
to fill the empty space,
where my opinions and thoughts once grew,
my mind so bruised and battered,
tormented by you,
I was the one patiently listening,
when nobody else would,
I was the one you always turned to,
because you thought i understood,
and now ive become nothing,
worn away by all your words,
and i just had to tell you,
but i doubt you even heard.
Copyright ©
Chanti
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2004-01-08 02:03:09]
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Re: Whisper
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by PhantomVampyress on
Thursday, 8th January 2004 @ 02:36:41 AM AEST
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this is an awesome write and very well expressed.. im sure everyone can relate to this at some point in their life.. I really liked the last verse alot.. great job
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Re: Whisper
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by Avarice_Riot on
Thursday, 8th January 2004 @ 03:30:40 AM AEST
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| A lot of anger in those words...I loved the last verse the most. Well done. |
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Re: Whisper
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by DreamWeaver on
Thursday, 8th January 2004 @ 04:55:17 AM AEST
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| Excellent write ... great words, rhyme, rhythm, everything ... Jan |
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Re: Whisper
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by afraid_of_fear on
Wednesday, 21st January 2004 @ 05:33:52 PM AEST
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i can sadly kind of relate to this.. a really angry poem, but very well written..
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Re: Whisper
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by Cynthia on
Sunday, 7th March 2004 @ 11:34:50 PM AEST
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| What an expressed write. You did a good job. Sometimes it just seems people don't want to listen at all. *S* Cynthia |
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Re: Whisper
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by wild_girl121 on
Friday, 29th April 2005 @ 11:17:30 AM AEST
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this has a lot of meaning when i read it... i can relate to it all the way down to the bone. but good write.
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