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The Surgeon
Contributed by
Coquillion
on
Thursday, 8th January 2004 @ 07:51:15 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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Well Hello!!!
This is SUCH a treat,
after all the months of stalking you
we finally get to meet!
No! You dont know me,
and Im absolutely sure
that, though I know you very well,
weve never met before.
Now Ill tell my secret,
Ill tell you why Im here.
and my bright and shiny knife
will make it all quite clear.
Ive come to kill you!
Im going to have such fun with you,
and you will plead for sweet release
long before Im done with you.
Why? Why me?
Oh so plaintively you cry.
Well, you useless bag of wind,
I shall tell you why.
You are a joke !
Despised by all and deeply hated.
A cancer upon the face of man
That must be terminated.
Now you ask
Is this a dream? Surely its not real.
Forgive me if I dont reply
Its time to make you squeal.
Copyright ©
Coquillion
... [
2004-01-08 19:51:15]
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Re: The Surgeon
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by Necromant on
Thursday, 8th January 2004 @ 07:59:35 PM AEST
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| Oh my this is perfect! The rhyme is really good, and makes the poem flowing. I like the theme and the ending is really great. The way you adressed the poem made me smile, I could even hear the voice speaking in my head really great and original. WoW! I'm amazed..;) |
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Re: The Surgeon
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by DreamWeaver on
Friday, 9th January 2004 @ 02:34:17 AM AEST
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| Scary stuff! Well written ... Jan |
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Re: The Surgeon
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by Vitreous_Soul on
Friday, 9th January 2004 @ 06:38:58 AM AEST
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Gah, this just kicked ass. Not sure what else to say!
Truly,
-V.S. |
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Re: The Surgeon
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by Cobalt on
Tuesday, 13th January 2004 @ 11:02:29 AM AEST
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| Had a touch of humor to the darkness. I liked this. |
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Re: The Surgeon
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by movax on
Thursday, 10th June 2004 @ 11:38:23 AM AEST
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| Oh man, this is good stuff. VERY GOOD. Keep on knifin' |
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