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Control
Contributed by
Necromant
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Sunday, 11th January 2004 @ 06:38:26 PM in AEST
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Control, its something Im lacking,
Previously there and suddenly missing,
You defy me everyday,
Always in a different way,
Escaping from my grip,
How could I let you slip?
Without you Im so weak,
I need you, even now as I speak!
My soul demands your attention,
Because right now its under loads of tension!
If you dont help my needs
Then my downfall will be your deed
Thanks to Empty_Soul for his precious help !! Thanks dude!! ;)
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Re: Control
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by Empty_Soul on
Sunday, 11th January 2004 @ 06:42:10 PM AEST
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Great poem anne, i didn't help much on this jus a couple of lines thanks for the mention though!! looking forward to your next write!
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Re: Control
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by forever_lonely on
Sunday, 11th January 2004 @ 06:56:30 PM AEST
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anne
this is such a heart felt and well thought up poem i love the way you dont let the poem flow but still hold it together with the wording its truely a peice of art
all the best luke |
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Re: Control
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by mystERA on
Monday, 12th January 2004 @ 01:55:22 PM AEST
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ANNE!
I love your poems coz i manage to understand you more and it is surprising me how much i do not know you!
dont worry about the simplicity. As i told you, ever Petrarch (another great poet as great as Dante) wrote in simple words. Your method is better coz ppl will undersand what you are trying to say, and they want to understand what they are reading :)
cheers and smiles :)
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Re: Control
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by Hurretje on
Monday, 29th March 2004 @ 08:03:56 AM AEST
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Another great and 'demanding' write. I've read several of your poems now, and you show so many sides of yourself, instead of hanging on to only one theme! I like that.
Hur
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Re: Control
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 12th April 2004 @ 05:08:26 PM AEST
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I think that is part of life trying to control it but not suceeding a very good write.
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Re: Control
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 1st March 2005 @ 03:07:06 AM AEST
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Humans usually look to where they are lacking and 'think' that they have misplaced whatever they may be looking for, yet it is always there with them. Find your strength and you will also find control...
The only problem is sustaining it.
It is difficult, yet while you have your control back, I am sure that you will look for something else in which you think you may be lacking. It is an aimless ever ending quest.
I liked this piece very much.
Especially the conclusive line.
It ends the piece, solemnly and effectively.
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