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voices
Contributed by
fallen_eyes
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Thursday, 15th January 2004 @ 10:39:19 AM in AEST
Topic:
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I hear their whispers
I feel their touch
Pushing me to do too much
they speak with a voice
A voice so cold
Did i just make a move to bold
They tell me things
things to hurt me
I want my avengance
they urge me on
tell me the name
This is no longer a game
they sneak an idea
an idea of pain
I feel i cannot i wait
they say it's time
I've made my move
But i fear it's too late
to end this terror
thats overwhelms me
I'm gone
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2004-01-15 10:39:19]
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Re: voices
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by forever_lonely on
Thursday, 15th January 2004 @ 12:34:20 PM AEST
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hey hun
This is a really amazing poem such raw emotion i had to read it twice just to get the full effect of it it was that good
Keep up the amazing write hun
Luke |
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Re: voices
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by sweetangeluk on
Thursday, 15th January 2004 @ 01:38:35 PM AEST
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Great poem
So descriptive
Liked the structure
Love Angelxxxxx |
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Re: voices
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by Necromant on
Thursday, 15th January 2004 @ 03:27:56 PM AEST
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Oh what a poem! I read it 5 times and i've always got the same strong reaction, dark indeed. The flow is really appropriate to the poem. Keep it up!
Anne :D |
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Re: voices
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by Kie on
Thursday, 15th January 2004 @ 07:19:00 PM AEST
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It is dark, and just what I need. Thank you for writing it.
Kie |
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Re: voices
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by Vitreous_Soul on
Friday, 16th January 2004 @ 05:15:33 AM AEST
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It would take the light of a dozen candles to transfix the darkness captured within this poem. I think this is my favorite so far, great theme, flow, and imagery. Flat out loved it.
Truly,
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Re: voices
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by Kindredblood_dragon on
Friday, 16th January 2004 @ 06:26:40 AM AEST
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You have an awesome way with words, so dark and so catchy.
Excellent write. |
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Re: voices
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by Empty_Soul on
Monday, 19th January 2004 @ 02:45:11 PM AEST
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i'm readin your poems in reverse, lol, oh well, another truely great write, more emotion, you do well writing off your emotions.
keep on fighting
Never stop writing
john xx |
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