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Perfect Murder
Contributed by
alecfernadez
on
Saturday, 17th January 2004 @ 03:07:07 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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I slip away into the night,
Holding that steel-gray knife,
Hiding behind the bushes,
Of an old broken house,
My cold arm twitches,
I creep in like a mouse,
My heart beats so fast,
Thoughts invade my head,
Thoughts from the past,
Images of the dead.
Its so dark inside,
Darkness surrounds me,
Pleanty of places to hide,
Zero Visibilty; prey unable to see,
Perfect conditions tonight,
To kill again for pleasure,
To regain my sight.
I hear a sound,
Its from the top floor,
Thinking I'd be found,
I hide behind a door.
Footsteps, so lound and clear,
whispering silently,
A voice filled with fear,
I Jump out violently,
See my target jump,
Holding the knife,
I run, blood begins to pump,
His eyes scared in the night,
Unaware of his action,
Causing this consequence,
A dark violent reaction,
caused by him, hence
I knock him down,
Knife closed to his neck,
Doesnt make a sound,
Doesnt even cry heck,
I smile, long have I waited,
Deep in the shadows,
Breath baited,
Now to take away sorrows,
The knife piereces his skin,
Cutting through,
Showing blood within,
It will be soon,
I cut deeper and deeper,
His eyes grow wider,
His strength weaker and weaker,
His strength begins to tire,
I stop and smile,
The knife cuts through his spine,
Finally happiness; Its been a while,
Now on his flesh I will dine.
But I stop and I drop the knife,
I hadnt lost all the pain,
A tear comes to my eye in the night,
What had I'd done...
I was sleepwalking again
Copyright ©
alecfernadez
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2004-01-17 15:07:07]
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Re: Perfect Murder
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by lostinmyself on
Saturday, 17th January 2004 @ 03:16:36 PM AEST
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| oh my god, that shocked me. what a twist!! never saw that coming, great write, keep it up xx |
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Re: Perfect Murder
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by Necromant on
Saturday, 17th January 2004 @ 03:24:24 PM AEST
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Oh! Very dark!! I loved it! Hehehe Yeah it has a really twisted ending hmm good flow and great description!
Anne :D |
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Re: Perfect Murder
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by Jellybellyprincess on
Saturday, 17th January 2004 @ 04:06:25 PM AEST
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DANG! ......... *speechless silence*.........
I can't think of a single thing to be said...... just, wow........
God bless,
Ellen |
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Re: Perfect Murder
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by Kindredblood_dragon on
Sunday, 18th January 2004 @ 12:49:58 AM AEST
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Im going to lock my doors now, since we got a freaky sleep walker out there with nothing but food on their mind.
Excellent poem, I had to read it twice just to make sure I didnt get it wrong.
Beautifully written. |
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Re: Perfect Murder
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by alecfernadez on
Sunday, 18th January 2004 @ 04:59:04 AM AEST
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I'm writing a screenplay basedon this poem. Never been done before, and should be able to do low budget next year :)
Alec Fernandez |
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Re: Perfect Murder
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by deathdrop on
Tuesday, 27th January 2004 @ 07:50:13 AM AEST
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| this poem and release are the 2 best poems that, i have ever read by you... keep on writing, you have a real talent! |
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Re: Perfect Murder
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by Cobalt on
Tuesday, 3rd February 2004 @ 01:41:04 PM AEST
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| I figured it was something like this... Not quite what I had in mind. It was a great write. You must have been sober for this write... Lol. |
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