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Confide
Contributed by
forever_lonely
on
Saturday, 17th January 2004 @ 08:06:42 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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Why do i run
Why do i hide
Why is it you
That i do confide
Why do i scream
Why do i sigh
Why i am i so lost
That i have to cry
What took me so long
What made me believe
What closed off my heart
To not even grieve
I want to tell you
I want you to know
I want you to hurt
So i can let go
I'm broken inside
I'm alone and i'm lost
I'm thinking of taking
The ultimate cost
My bed filled of anger
My face drentched in tears
My heart but still strong
To carry my years
I'll leave you with this
I'll open your mind
I'll not be the only
Depressed one you find
These problem are small
These hurtings are tiny
These poems are not
The last ever by me
So listen my friends
So Think hard and true
So open your heart
...and ill open to you
Copyright ©
forever_lonely
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2004-01-17 20:06:42]
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Re: Confide
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by faith_my_eyes on
Saturday, 17th January 2004 @ 08:11:41 PM AEST
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Good writing! You expressed the emotion clearly. I know it can be hard to tell someone what you're feeling when they don't want to hear.
God bless
~Em |
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Re: Confide
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by Vitreous_Soul on
Sunday, 18th January 2004 @ 08:28:27 AM AEST
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Like I said before, we're on the same page. Good rhyme, smooth flow, and not at all too long (I usually prefer long poems, because some feelings are too complex to express in a mere few lines).
Truly,
-V.S. |
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Re: Confide
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by Empty_Soul on
Sunday, 18th January 2004 @ 09:56:56 AM AEST
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Once again a great poem dude. Yes its long but beacuse of the structure and flow of it, it works really well and doesnt seem that long at all, really enjoyable to read.
Keep on writing,
Never stop fighting.
John |
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Re: Confide
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by Necromant on
Thursday, 22nd January 2004 @ 10:54:12 AM AEST
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Wow!!!! I'm temporarily speechless!! ........ ..... .... .. . . . . This is a great poem! One of the best! Its very emotional, sad and the end is stunning. Great writing I loved this one!
Anne :D |
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Re: Confide
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by blueheart on
Thursday, 29th January 2004 @ 12:26:48 AM AEST
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| I have a problem in confiding in people. This so applies to me. Great poem. |
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Re: Confide
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by Cobalt on
Wednesday, 4th February 2004 @ 12:50:13 PM AEST
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| I really liked this one. It just carried itself so well. It was wonderfuly written. Very nicely done. |
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