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As i wait
Contributed by
tecnorobo
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Monday, 19th January 2004 @ 05:25:19 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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As I wait for her appearance
My mind shifts
Scattered thoughts become one
She has stepped into the room
As I wait for opportunity
My hands sweat, and my heart grieves
The words are chained to my tongue
Feeling the nervousness consume
As I wait for one more chance
I cry tears of jealousy
I long for what they have
Only sadness is left to loom
Ive waited to long
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2004-01-19 17:25:19]
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Re: As i wait
(User Rating: 1 )
by Jackee_line on
Monday, 19th January 2004 @ 06:26:29 PM AEST
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Firstly let me welcome you to the YPDC family, you are amongst friends.
I enjoyed reading your poem. I felt the hesitation within your words.
Great write, i look forward to reading more of yours. |
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Re: As i wait
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by Kie on
Monday, 19th January 2004 @ 11:16:22 PM AEST
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Welcome! Welcome!
I was really impressed with this first poem you have submitted. You expressed your feelings well and you are on your way to greatness. I look forward to the next one. Kie |
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