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Etched with a burning flame
Contributed by
MissLee
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Monday, 19th January 2004 @ 05:44:32 PM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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In the sands of time I wrote of my love for you,
I wrote about everything you do,
I wrote night and day,
But the sea of the ages washed it away,
I wrote again once more,
In journals i wrote all my heart could outpour,
I wrote it in all colors and shades,
But paper crumbles and ink fades,
I filled the pages with tears, that turned sour and rotten,
I wrote it in a song, but the notes are long forgotten,
I imangined it in my mind, but cells deteriorate,
And memories evaporate
So I etched it in my heart with a burning flame,
That spells out your name,
And as I go along my lifes way,
That is where it shall always stay.
Copyright ©
MissLee
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2004-01-19 17:44:32]
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Re: Etched with a burning flame
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by ShadowDaughter on
Wednesday, 21st January 2004 @ 07:01:45 PM AEST
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Wowowowowowow! "so I etchd it in my heart with a burning flame"-- again your gift for putting images in a reader's mind shine through with this. Whoa . . .
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Re: Etched with a burning flame
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by SensitiveSoAbused on
Friday, 23rd January 2004 @ 09:47:01 PM AEST
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This is a great poem. a few awkward lines but i loved the repeated metaphors and the constant struggle and failure expressed. very beautiful.
and please, continue to comment on my poems.
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