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An obscene crowd
Contributed by
fallen_eyes
on
Monday, 19th January 2004 @ 07:42:39 PM in AEST
Topic:
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A lost thought
A time not here
A moment sought
A time of fear
The abscent mind
The stolen touch
The will to find
The want of much
In a distant place
In a sudden dash
In a need of space
In the smallest slash
With a certain day
With a silent move
With a certain way
With a poisoned grove
To an empty place
To an obscene thought
To a private space
To a time once sought
Crowd in my heart
Crowd in a room
Crowd from the start
Crowd inside doom
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Re: An obscene crowd
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by forever_lonely on
Monday, 19th January 2004 @ 07:49:12 PM AEST
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Very not bad young tam tam
I really love this explain how we all feel sometimes really spoke with each line and said so much with so few words each one
all the best hun
love luke |
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Re: An obscene crowd
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by Empty_Soul on
Tuesday, 20th January 2004 @ 05:26:18 AM AEST
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really clever style on this one tam, luke was tellin me bout it last night. it really expresses the emotions and thoughts we all have at times, great poem.
Keep on fighting
never stop writing
love john x |
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Re: An obscene crowd
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by Vitreous_Soul on
Tuesday, 20th January 2004 @ 08:07:17 AM AEST
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Very unique style, good flow. I enjoyed this poem very much, as it spoke to me with it's message. Excellent job.
Truly,
-V.S. |
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Re: An obscene crowd
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by Butterat_Zool on
Thursday, 29th January 2004 @ 10:57:17 PM AEST
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| A lovely poem... I feel your emotions and the subtle dark thoughts you're experiencing here... It makes me wish i knew more about what caused these thoughts though... what a fine write... Have a nice day. Butterat Zool. |
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