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My First and Last Love Poem
Contributed by
ShadowDaughter
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Tuesday, 20th January 2004 @ 11:07:28 PM in AEST
Topic:
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I wanted to write you a beautiful poem
about the tingling heat of the noonday sun
warming the back of my neck
about the flickering candle flame
bright and powerful, contained
and how neither shine so brightly as do you.
I wanted to write you a beautiful poem
about the cool, clear sip of water
when there's naught been had for days
about the soft and comforting bed
as I relax after a wearisome day
and how neither come so welcome as the sight of you.
I wanted to write you a beautiful poem
about the smell of chocolate brownies
newly taken from the oven
about the wrinkled yellow pages
of a book that's long been kept
and how neither do I love so much as you.
I wanted to write you a beautiful poem
about love and nonsense and laughter
and other such golden things
but alas, I could not do so
the words just wouldn't come
I'm afraid you'll have to take this instead.
Copyright ©
ShadowDaughter
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2004-01-20 23:07:28]
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Re: My First and Last Love Poem
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by whisper-of-night on
Tuesday, 20th January 2004 @ 11:19:56 PM AEST
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| Awwww..... this is such a beautiful poem....... Arrrrrr...... if only a girl would write something like that to me......... please, let there be more, reading it feel so much better than those dark poems, please??? ^_^ |
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Re: My First and Last Love Poem
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by Vitreous_Soul on
Wednesday, 21st January 2004 @ 08:00:04 AM AEST
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Geez, Nora, you're starting to sound like me. I liked this poem (except maybe the end). You would do well to pursue this type a little more frequently. I know you have it inside you, just let it out.
This is a great window into the kind soul that i've come to know.
Truly,
-V.S. |
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Re: My First and Last Love Poem
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by Kie on
Wednesday, 21st January 2004 @ 07:56:13 PM AEST
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| You just shine in this write and your words are so poetically beautiful. I also think you should pursue this type of writing at least one more time because I LOVED it. Great job! Kie |
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Re: My First and Last Love Poem
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by ladyfawn on
Thursday, 22nd January 2004 @ 10:50:19 PM AEST
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| yes, you have a flare for this, love the images, *wants brownies now* sweetly romantic:) hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: My First and Last Love Poem
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 25th January 2004 @ 12:36:18 PM AEST
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Wow. Wowwowwowowwowow.
That was.... Grand. |
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Re: My First and Last Love Poem
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by Fionndruinne on
Monday, 9th February 2004 @ 10:52:31 PM AEST
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All these people are sweetly suggesting that you write more love poetry. I'll come right out and DEMAND it. Write more!
Blessings.
Andrew |
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Re: My First and Last Love Poem
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by Spazzo on
Tuesday, 12th October 2004 @ 10:43:27 PM AEST
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Very beautiful.
Spazzo |
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