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Killing Time
Contributed by
Cobalt
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Wednesday, 21st January 2004 @ 02:13:22 AM in AEST
Topic:
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Standing here waiting. Hoping to hear your voice. Staring at the sun and I was dancing in the rain. Yeah, I was just killing time and it killed me right back. In your arms I could always breath and say the right thing. Walking down your block I could always hear you sing. Now I find that I've been dancing with a train. But, I was just killing time and it kills me right back. I was never satisfied staying here with you at my side. I guess thats why we could just never do the right things. Baby I know it's dead and gone. 'Cause I was just killing time and it's killing right back.
The faulty phoenix
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Re: Killing Time
(User Rating: 1 ) by desertwispers on
Wednesday, 21st January 2004 @ 02:37:16 AM AEST (User
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I enjoyed this I liked how you compared killing time then it coming back to kill you
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Re: Killing Time
(User Rating: 1 ) by emystar on
Wednesday, 21st January 2004 @ 05:31:01 AM AEST (User
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Good work even tho sad.
huggs, luv,
emy |
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Re: Killing Time
(User Rating: 1 ) by lovingcritters on
Wednesday, 21st January 2004 @ 06:30:24 AM AEST (User
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cobalt.......that would make a beautiful song. I can hear it being sung right now. Great lyrics I find!
lovingcritters
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Re: Killing Time
(User Rating: 1 ) by hawaii06 on
Wednesday, 21st January 2004 @ 12:40:45 PM AEST (User
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I like the way you compared the two topics and you are a good writer and should continue to write...Hope to see more from you soon.... |
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Re: Killing Time
(User Rating: 1 ) by sweetangeluk on
Wednesday, 21st January 2004 @ 01:25:05 PM AEST (User
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I also picture it in my mind as a song Wonderful lyrics to hum along to
Can hear it as i make up my own tune to it Brill
Love Sweet angelxxxxx |
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Re: Killing Time
(User Rating: 1 ) by deathdrop on
Wednesday, 21st January 2004 @ 02:05:01 PM AEST (User
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hya, (from deathdrop) how r u? |
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Re: Killing Time
(User Rating: 1 ) by Kie on
Wednesday, 21st January 2004 @ 03:42:11 PM AEST (User
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I agree with the other comments. It is a great write and it has a lyrical feel to it. It would make for a great song all you need is a melody. So sad and so good...Kie |
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Re: Killing Time
(User Rating: 1 ) by bobotheclown on
Wednesday, 21st January 2004 @ 08:36:59 PM AEST (User
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yo dude good poem as always. sorry I haven't been reading yer poems lately been busy with various ***** been flung in my face. I liked the 'killing time, and it's killing me right back' part that was friggin good.
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Re: Killing Time
(User Rating: 1 ) by venkat on
Thursday, 22nd January 2004 @ 12:41:40 AM AEST (User
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Well written..its a good job..dear friend..I am now terribly busy.. time does not allow me to kill it.:o) venkat |
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Re: Killing Time
(User Rating: 1 ) by Necromant on
Thursday, 22nd January 2004 @ 09:03:27 AM AEST (User
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Oh very emotional! I liked this poem! WoW amazing! And a little sad as well ...Keep on writing!
Anne :D |
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Re: Killing Time
(User Rating: 1 ) by MoonlitAngel on
Thursday, 22nd January 2004 @ 09:49:24 PM AEST (User
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Wow that's awesome! I love the feel of it, and the lines "I was just killing time and it killed me right back" - truly awesome stuff! Love it to bits.
~ Moonlit |
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Re: Killing Time
(User Rating: 1 ) by Daniela_Maria_Violin on
Friday, 23rd January 2004 @ 11:23:04 AM AEST (User
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everything that I was going to say has already been said... so I'll just add my name to your fanfare. :) Great write! |
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Re: Killing Time
(User Rating: 1 ) by jeanie on
Friday, 23rd January 2004 @ 05:01:25 PM AEST (User
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Brr, that made me shiver...I hope you haven't lived that.....nonetheless your words were soo real and giving the exact point, I liked it alot :D
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