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Dejections Reflection
Contributed by
forever_lonely
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Friday, 23rd January 2004 @ 08:37:43 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Sitting watching this childs reflection,
Tying to find these words of dejection.
My emotions are pent up so deep inside,
All i ever what is to run and hide.
I see a lonely child so lost in my dreams,
Watching him cry his life away under silent moonbeams.
Sitting here craddled by this shell of myself,
Surrounded by demons of mental ill health.
Depression is the key to unlock my true sorrow,
The only words ill ever hear... 'ill open up tomorrow'.
I bring along troubles and problems i face,
To some of my friends im such a disgrace.
So many have tried to crack open my casing,
To find its only their time theyre wasting.
Surrounded by pain i sit here and cower,
As this image takes form and slowly devours.
Ill leave you with this my form of emotion,
As i stand here and wait for my eyes lost potion.
Immortal are my words of Dejection,
Looking within on this childs reflection.
Copyright ©
forever_lonely
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2004-01-23 20:37:43]
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Re: Dejections Reflection
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by blueheart on
Saturday, 24th January 2004 @ 12:37:15 AM AEST
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| Great poem, brimming with emotion. |
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Re: Dejections Reflection
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by ladyfawn on
Saturday, 24th January 2004 @ 03:05:10 AM AEST
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| well written, very sad... hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: Dejections Reflection
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by Vitreous_Soul on
Saturday, 24th January 2004 @ 08:09:37 AM AEST
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The subject speaks to me so much, it's almost eerie. The rhymes caught my attention, as well. Lastly, I loved the title. Great job, keep 'em coming.
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Re: Dejections Reflection
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by SkYYBLu on
Saturday, 24th January 2004 @ 12:42:34 PM AEST
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| Great write. |
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Re: Dejections Reflection
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by hawaii06 on
Sunday, 25th January 2004 @ 06:11:13 PM AEST
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Very sad poem yet very well written...it caught my eye right away...I enjoyed reading this poem and plan on reading more soon...
Jamie |
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Re: Dejections Reflection
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by Empty_Soul on
Wednesday, 28th January 2004 @ 05:33:18 PM AEST
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I bring along troubles and problems i face,
To some of my friends im such a disgrace.
yeah ok dude, lol, u never disgrace 2 us lol, bit unclean maybe but not disgrace, haha lmfao.
amazin poem dude, only point i would make is that i dont like layout of it, prehaps split it into a few smaller stanzas to make it more reader friendly other than that its perfect an full of emotion.
keep on fighting
never stop writing
John |
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