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Lost in the mind
Contributed by
Disenchanted_Poet
on
Thursday, 29th January 2004 @ 09:30:44 AM in AEST
Topic:
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I sit at night in candlelight and watch the spider dining
Sucking out the poor fly's juices, still the fly keeps whining
I watch with fright and great delight at this cruel pantomiming
As I sit beside myself in this apothecaries lining
Exquisitely your eyes do shine when rolled back into the water
Face down and floating, father finds his lone, beloved daughter
The sounds last heard in your mortal ears were mine own wicked laughter
You thought you loved me once my dear, but truly never after
Guillotine's blade drops so fast, your head lies in a basket
Eyes stare blankly, face still crying, lying in a casket
So swift, so fast, and in a flash, although my laughter masks it
I tried to crush your throat my dear, it proved too hard a task
Gunshot rings into the night, and still your feet keep slapping
I fire twice, I fire thrice, the city still keeps napping
Your body lies now in the gutter... life is draining, sapping
Your body never found again within the cities mapping
I cry myself to tears sometimes, when you are in my mind
I tried to kill myself to death, but in my head you shined
Pretty face and handsome eyes, no wrinkle yet has lined
Your voice still whispers in my head, among the gears that grind
The spider stopped, the fly a shell... arachnid now is fed
No longer moving, fly lies still, where it at once had bled
Like some eternal fuel you were, and I the fire fed
I should have listened to the words that you had always said.
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Re: Lost in the mind
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by subnet_spider on
Thursday, 29th January 2004 @ 09:53:55 AM AEST
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| Great stuff! This describes how I once felt. |
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Re: Lost in the mind
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by LOWMAN613 on
Thursday, 29th January 2004 @ 10:04:53 AM AEST
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| Very creative,well done! Christina |
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Re: Lost in the mind
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by ygraine_17 on
Thursday, 29th January 2004 @ 10:16:42 AM AEST
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| gosh, this poem really had a surreal impact on me great imagery used esspecially in the third stanza. "life is draining, sapping". (really like this line!). Keep up the good work, hope to read some more. |
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Re: Lost in the mind
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by ladyfawn on
Friday, 30th January 2004 @ 12:44:55 AM AEST
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love this, love this, ...all in a space of a few moments in the mind, while the spider dined, vivid images, i was right behind you watching too, thanx for the trip, i must say too, this line,"I tried to kill myself to death" made me laugh out loud, dunno if you meant for it too, just struck me as funny, then immediatly i was serious again, captvated, few poems do this to me, hugs n' love nessa
p.s. never quit writing! |
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Re: Lost in the mind
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by Cobalt on
Wednesday, 10th March 2004 @ 12:58:59 AM AEST
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| Interesting write. It was good though. |
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