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Paradise
Contributed by
hawaii06
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Friday, 30th January 2004 @ 06:21:47 PM in AEST
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Fast paced hula dancers, like swimmers in a competition
Sensitive couples walking hand in hand, warm and cuddly like a teddy bear
Waves crash against the rocks with the force of 1000 soldiers
Loud, constant beat of the Hawaiian drum, like drummers in a parade
Squishy, sinking soft sand
Cold Ocean waves, like the shower on my body
Delicious coconuts, fresh and just picked
Sugary, sweet sensation of a Hawaiian guava
Steaming hot pavement, like the lava that erupts from a volcano
Gust of wind in my face, as cold as snow
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Re: Paradise
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by Wachumiri on
Monday, 2nd February 2004 @ 03:41:15 AM AEST
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I really liked the alliteration, it's really cool.
Tale care.
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Re: Paradise
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by Wachumiri on
Monday, 2nd February 2004 @ 03:42:15 AM AEST
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"Tale care"... yah, I meant "Take"....
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