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Antidote
Contributed by
afraid_of_fear
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Sunday, 1st February 2004 @ 03:40:05 PM in AEST
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I hear the rain as it splatters against my heart
I feel the cold as it wraps its icy fingers around my throat
I believe the lies I am told and breathe them in till I choke
I see the sky falling in, and pray for an eternal antidote
I sense your eyes bleeding; they hurt as they see my pain
I wonder when everyone will stop playing this game
I want to know when people will just let me die
I cry screams, cant you let me fall into the sky
I slowly calm down as I no longer fear death
I gather everything and nothing I have left
I wish and hope you will all let go of me
I dont dare turn back; it is time, it must be
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Re: Antidote
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by LiveTheDream on
Sunday, 1st February 2004 @ 04:04:43 PM AEST
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I LOVE THIS
it fits my emotions perfectlyand i think you wrote it brilliantly
i hope things get better for you as i do me
xxx |
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Re: Antidote
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by blueheart on
Monday, 2nd February 2004 @ 08:54:54 AM AEST
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| Wow, the emotion clearly laid out. Great poem Char. |
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Re: Antidote
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 6th February 2004 @ 03:14:08 PM AEST
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Your need is clear,you need to not hear or listen to what other negative people say or do!You also need to feel loved and appreciated for the beautiful person that you are! And no my dear Charlotte,I will NEVER let you go!!!
~~~Angel~~~always...godspeed...joni |
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Re: Antidote
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by Necromant on
Wednesday, 11th February 2004 @ 04:33:31 PM AEST
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What a powerful poem, very vivid imagery! *feel chilly* I hope you find the antidote too, the resigned (Is that the approproate word? bhehe dunno) ending is really unexpected, don't give up. Great write!!
Anne :D |
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Re: Antidote
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by bobotheclown on
Friday, 13th February 2004 @ 08:30:06 PM AEST
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this was awesome. The first stanza really hit me hard for some reason. It was all amazing, but the 2nd line wow that was friggin great. Hope to see more soon.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: Antidote
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by CuttersAngel on
Friday, 13th February 2004 @ 08:35:40 PM AEST
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| Sometimes the ones you think aren't good turn out to be the best... i think this is great and maybe someday you'll see it too. |
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Re: Antidote
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by wyrd_faerie on
Friday, 2nd April 2004 @ 05:13:25 PM AEST
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| this is amazing char... |
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