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Is There An End?
Contributed by
starlight_dancer
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Friday, 6th February 2004 @ 10:44:46 AM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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The emotions I feel, they change so fast,
Finally I feel happy at last.
The rapid change as sadness has come,
Suddenly feeling completely numb.
No way to explain the feelings I feel,
The only way to describe it is surreal.
Stuck in a circle getting sucked deeper in,
Going round and around, my head starts to spin
Trying to put the feelings to the back of my head,
Sadness is the emotion I always dread.
It wont go, it wont go away,
Please just tell me that Ill be ok?
Slowly pulling through once more,
Understanding what Im here for
That thought always occupying my mind
'When will the next time be that I cry myself blind?'
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Re: Is There An End?
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by harmoni on
Friday, 6th February 2004 @ 11:09:54 AM AEST
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| A BEAUTIFUL WRITE. YOU'RE BE OK |
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Re: Is There An End?
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by mercedes on
Friday, 6th February 2004 @ 11:15:01 AM AEST
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| I have the same problem most of the time. You describe it so well. Just remember the sadness doesnt last forever, you will be ok. |
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Re: Is There An End?
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by apollo on
Friday, 6th February 2004 @ 11:48:28 AM AEST
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| beautiful write, don't worry im sure u'll be ok. i promise. |
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Re: Is There An End?
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by blueheart on
Saturday, 7th February 2004 @ 01:41:00 AM AEST
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| I so relate. Loved the last line. Nice. |
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Re: Is There An End?
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by Vitreous_Soul on
Saturday, 7th February 2004 @ 05:25:26 AM AEST
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Such a beautiful poem...and a feeling I know very well. I would like nothing more than happiness for you, I really do mean that.
Truly,
-Dan |
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Re: Is There An End?
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by Wachumiri on
Tuesday, 10th February 2004 @ 04:12:57 AM AEST
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May you find peace in Him.
Take care. (I mean it)
David |
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Re: Is There An End?
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by Wrybod on
Wednesday, 17th March 2004 @ 03:38:25 AM AEST
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If I may use an analogy......a ship with not enough ballast is unstable. Floating too high in the water it is at the mercy of every wind and wave.
Age and experience is like a ship taking on cargo or more ballast to stabilise it.
It is obvious from your introspective and emotional poem, that that is precisely what you are doing and in answer to your third verse.................You, like all of us, are here to survive. That is the first and only "commandment" in life that we know for a fact. The rest is delusion or illusion born of ignorance which we conjure up to feel safe i.e. protected.
What I Ilike most about your work is that you
face the challenge. You express yourself within a chosen set of rules. Your verses rhyme and scan. They are true poetry.
I see you applying these same qualities to your everyday life as you mature. Oh yes you,(the vessel of our analogy) will encounter violent "storms" but will be "trimmed" to survive. Do not fear the storm, when you see it comming prepare for it.
If I sound like an old "prelate", skip all this and read some of my poems. I'm in my late seventies and tend to go on a bit when I see the sort of potential you have. It's like the sun breaking through the clouds of suicidal tragedy that pervades YPDC here and there.
Bob
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Re: Is There An End?
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by STRaNGe_LiNDSeY on
Saturday, 3rd April 2004 @ 12:47:11 PM AEST
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| Starlight, everything will get better, everything will be ok... i hope you the best. awesome write. you have a true talent. |
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Re: Is There An End?
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by mickie on
Wednesday, 28th April 2004 @ 09:33:50 AM AEST
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| i feel that there wil never be an end to it. i have been so sad and it really never goes completely away, you know? listen, you keep it together. i know what it is to be down on your luck. i deal with it more than the average person. you just have to get through it. please keep in touch and i will tell you more about myself. promise. |
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Re: Is There An End?
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by Marcus493 on
Sunday, 16th May 2004 @ 12:29:31 AM AEST
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| a good write and read I say chap! |
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Re: Is There An End?
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by ammalu on
Monday, 14th June 2004 @ 06:07:49 AM AEST
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| Touching -more realistic too - things'll be o.k. when time passes by - it's all in the game of life - good write - keep it up. |
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Re: Is There An End?
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by Solnubis on
Friday, 30th July 2004 @ 06:36:04 PM AEST
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| Your poem was beautiful and I liked how you expressed yourself. |
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Re: Is There An End?
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by kyletycz on
Monday, 16th August 2004 @ 06:20:14 PM AEST
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awsome poem, i liked it alot
l8r
Ninja Tycz |
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Re: Is There An End?
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by clowns_can_burn on
Wednesday, 1st September 2004 @ 11:06:19 AM AEST
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this says alot about it, and its a great write. mi agree with everyone else when saying that you will be okay
much love
Amanda |
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Re: Is There An End?
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by SkaterGirl16 on
Wednesday, 13th October 2004 @ 07:08:57 PM AEST
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| I completely understand how you feel. I can relate to this poem. Good job! |
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