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-with my wounds still fresh-
Contributed by
TaintedOptomist
on
Tuesday, 10th February 2004 @ 06:18:01 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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let out insecurities
by the ship load
say clever words
and little forget me nots
like "i love you"
and "i love you more"
came broken and bleeding
throw myself oon the flames
just to see you smile
am i standing on solid ground
or am i setting myself up
for another big fall
afraid to be anything mare
than a locked box of uncertanties
you'll probably be the death of me
(if i don't get there first)
i wouldn't have it any other way
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TaintedOptomist
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Re: -with my wounds still fresh-
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by Remy on
Tuesday, 10th February 2004 @ 06:25:31 PM AEST
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platying with fire now are we, gotta love those dangerous games that we continue to play.... this reminds me of so many things, nifty!
~Remy~ |
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Re: -with my wounds still fresh-
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by Jackee_line on
Tuesday, 10th February 2004 @ 06:51:30 PM AEST
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| Good poem, it would be better if you could maybe check the spelling before posting. Just my opinion. |
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Re: -with my wounds still fresh-
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by evryrose on
Tuesday, 10th February 2004 @ 09:05:59 PM AEST
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| excellent write...I enjoyed it |
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Re: -with my wounds still fresh-
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by jeanie on
Wednesday, 11th February 2004 @ 04:06:09 AM AEST
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Pretty well written, reminds me some of my thoughts...
Hehe, the ending was cool, I would put
"you'll probably be the death of me
(if I don't get you there first)" :p
jeanie
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Re: -with my wounds still fresh-
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 14th February 2004 @ 08:02:00 PM AEST
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| about the spelling.... i dont think spell checks are very creative, and if optomist has typed something the way he has it shld b accepted. you dont know whether he meant to type that or not. stream of consciousness doesn't always make sense. |
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Re: -with my wounds still fresh-
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by TaintedOptomist on
Saturday, 21st February 2004 @ 04:37:04 AM AEST
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| Hi i'm the untalented author of this garbage you're giving me happy little comments on. spell checks are evil they make valium into "volumes" utterly destoying the play on words i was attempting. well ENJOY any other bit of literary travasty i've created. (i don't hold a high regard for myself) |
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