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middle of nowhere
Contributed by
SAT
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Friday, 13th February 2004 @ 04:30:09 PM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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how could he lead me,
to the middle of nowhere,
and leave me alone,
with nothing but memories,
memories of us when we were happy.
how could he leave me,
Out in the open,
for all to see and stare,
To laugh and mauque,
He finds it amusing.
How could he leave me,
alone with no one,
Scard for life and forever,
with no one to care,
for me, or my broken heart.
Shallow is all he is,
no less no more,
the averedge screw in the box,
and i a peice of wood,
so why not have some fun.
The fun is over,
its not a game anymore,
And even if it still was,
im far ahead on the board,
and you're doomed to lose.
Copyright ©
SAT
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2004-02-13 16:30:09]
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Re: middle of nowhere
(User Rating: 1 )
by Shadow on
Friday, 13th February 2004 @ 04:41:33 PM AEST
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| What words can one speak to numbe pain? None and i should know. The poem is expresive and angry at points. Others it was spitful and vengful. Mixture of many emotions. The format was good. Hey in my opinion for what it's worth you just need a friend to talk to. It helps. Trust me. Good luck. |
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Re: middle of nowhere
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by Lionel on
Friday, 13th February 2004 @ 08:11:29 PM AEST
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| I like your poem, but not the way that you were treated. You may want to edit the poem, though. Mauque probably should be mock; scard should be scarred and averedge should be average and peice should be piece. Hopes this helps. God bless, Lionel |
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