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The Common Flu
Contributed by
Jason_Robert_Britt
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Friday, 20th February 2004 @ 06:11:43 AM in AEST
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This pond has frozen over
Thin ice beneath the sober
Cracks in the ice
A reflection of our grins
Strapped on a pair of skates
Peeked into heaven's gates
Watched angel's fall
So heavy with their sins
(the world slept)
Together and bound
In mock love and slavery
Fleshless but crowned
In shackels, on our knees
An eternity found
Of hardship and misery
Clench your lord's gown
Wipe his ass with your sleeve
The hand of God's a glove
A condom filled with love
We dare not touch
Now the feeling's gone away
Look in the rearview mirror
Maybe you'll see me clearer
Waving good-bye
With nothing else to say
(and I wept)
this religious stew
is our common flu
I hate you
cause you hate me too
Together and bound
In mock love and slavery
Fleshless but crowned
In shackles, on our knees
An eternity found
Of hardship and misery
Clench your lord's gown
Wipe his ass with your sleeve
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Re: The Common Flu
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by Jolly on
Friday, 20th February 2004 @ 06:48:08 AM AEST
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| great! |
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Re: The Common Flu
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 20th February 2004 @ 01:58:49 PM AEST
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| I like this a lot. The metaphor of God's glove was excellent, as well as the larger viral metaphor, too. Well done. |
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Re: The Common Flu
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by bobotheclown on
Saturday, 21st February 2004 @ 09:50:31 PM AEST
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very interesting... I enjoyed it although I like other stuff by you better and of course your opinion counts.
In shackels, on our knees
An eternity found
Of hardship and misery
I loved those lines. Keep on posting buddy I've missed yer stuff.
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Re: The Common Flu
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by Cancer on
Friday, 12th March 2004 @ 11:52:45 PM AEST
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i'm finding it harder and harder to understand why i haven't gone back and read all your work from the beginning. each one of your writes that i've read have been totally different and yet they all seem to have that same dark bite. that same sneer behind the statement. you have an unfair amount of talent.
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Re: The Common Flu
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by Archie on
Sunday, 30th May 2004 @ 06:06:01 AM AEST
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| Do you hate all religion or do you hate fanaticism? Your metaphors are good yet underneath them is an anger that it is hard to comprehend that says all religion is wrong, or seemingly so. |
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