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Smile
Contributed by
confused_nutter
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Sunday, 22nd February 2004 @ 07:26:30 AM in AEST
Topic:
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Smile, is what 'they' will all say,
Smile as I hurt every night and every day.
This dark beast that lurks within me,
Thrashing, tearing, setting my mind free.
On this holy night, i drive the blade in,
Over my face, stretches the sadistic beasts grin.
Peace surrounds me, overwhelming all thought,
Purplexing lessons, of which i was taught.
'They' were all wrong, misunderstanding my tears,
The ravenous beast, casting out my fears.
Hear the screams, from beyond the door,
Her mind and body, spilled over the floor.
In the dark, 'they' all lie dead,
Insanity grasping, every mere thought fled.
Smile is what they told me, push the beast aside,
Smile? i do. With the beast by my side.
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Re: Smile
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by silent on
Sunday, 22nd February 2004 @ 09:42:31 AM AEST
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| I can relate to that one, i like the last line. good one |
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Re: Smile
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by arden on
Sunday, 22nd February 2004 @ 11:09:18 AM AEST
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thats awesome. i can relate. very dark, good job. keep it up i wanna see more.
Arden |
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Re: Smile
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by DreamWeaver on
Monday, 23rd February 2004 @ 04:43:33 AM AEST
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| Great write ... dark and brooding ... I relate well ... Jan |
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Re: Smile
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by kissez_x0x0_hugz on
Wednesday, 25th February 2004 @ 09:49:58 PM AEST
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I have no idea what to say it is way too good for words! I don't know what to say except HOLY MAMA MIA PICKLE JUICE! lol somthing my teacher use to say...but no seriously this is an awesomly written piece of work! I loved it!!! keep it up plz
x0x0x~CaNdIe~ |
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Re: Smile
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by Dawny on
Tuesday, 2nd March 2004 @ 02:04:23 PM AEST
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This one is the best yet!!
Powerful, dark, descritive, and ominous.
Love Dawny x |
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Re: Smile
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by AliB on
Tuesday, 2nd March 2004 @ 06:30:56 PM AEST
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Dawny can't spell, please forgive her lol.
Anyway I loved this poem, you have a very good way of putting words together, deep and dark, I've got my eye out for more of the same from you, well done.
Ali xx |
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