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free falling
Contributed by
ladyfawn
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Friday, 27th February 2004 @ 10:41:01 AM in AEST
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Signatures By
The Tired Lion
throw my ashes in the air
they will blow to earth or sea
for it will matter not
to me
you the sweetest i ever knew
loosing you brought me to my knees
will i have a breath of temper left?
may the blankets fall over me
stealing my breath
let me join you there
save me from the wreckage of my heart
let the wind blow through me
whilst my soul is living
will my words be heard after death
a dozen years one hundred more
i was lonely before ever i went
declaring the death of my living hope
roses will bloom and butterflies still flutter
when i be dead or underground
tenderness increases when we are gone
it is quiet where i am going
dawns kiss and evenings sunsets
i want to sleep underneath the walnut tree
a second, a minute, a century
but everyone will know i'm still alive
poetry a breath that will survive
let it wash away the pain
like the rain shadows the sun
for my heart will be in the open seas
write and walk around the house with the dogs
whisper softly, dance in the morning light
black ashen tides of twilight
bring the horse drawn carriage
drowning in the glow i hear in my sleep
time annihilates the grasp of all dreamers
with common knowledge death comes lastly
meare finality to this terror called life
what death is great, only your own
another realm, new dimension
death is a season without end
throw my ashes in the air
they will blow to earth or sea
for it will matter not
to me
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ladyfawn
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Re: free falling
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by Aika on
Friday, 27th February 2004 @ 10:49:41 AM AEST
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Oh my god!
you made me cry,
your feelings so strong
I wish you were satisfied!!
Hugs and lot of love, aika:-) |
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Re: free falling
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by Rakerman1999 on
Friday, 27th February 2004 @ 10:51:34 AM AEST
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You stole my breath with this Nessa. Unearthly in its beauty and sadness.
Makes me worried about you though
(((((((((Nessa))))))))))
Rose at your feet
Larry
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Re: free falling
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by norm on
Friday, 27th February 2004 @ 10:53:44 AM AEST
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Too well-written to stop for any reason
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I love your poem..it is sad, it is true,
I'd never opt to see you yon,
For your poems would end
And the world would send
An angel to see where you've gone
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Re: free falling
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 27th February 2004 @ 11:40:12 AM AEST
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A constructive comment;
loved it
loved it
loved it.
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Re: free falling
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by forever_lonely on
Friday, 27th February 2004 @ 12:26:12 PM AEST
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What a touching poem and it has my most favorite lines of any write i have ever read
''black ashen tides of twilight
bring the horse drawn carriage
drowning in the glow i hear in my sleep
time annihilates the grasp of all dreamers'' speechless absolutely speechless
Luke |
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Re: free falling
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by DreamWeaver on
Friday, 27th February 2004 @ 06:29:37 PM AEST
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| Oh Nessa, your poetry is so enchantingly beautiful ... but I am worried for you also ... please take care ... hugs Jan |
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Re: free falling
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by Merry on
Friday, 27th February 2004 @ 07:40:16 PM AEST
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In every ending there is a new beginning, , your words are so full of despair, but as dark as this poem is there is a new beginning waiting for you my dearest nessa.
Let your pen write away the darkness that plagues you and be ready for all the good that awaits you.
Your poetry is exquisite.
Hugs
daisy*merry |
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Re: free falling
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by emystar on
Friday, 27th February 2004 @ 08:31:19 PM AEST
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Hey there,
This is very creative and great writing.
I told my kids to all roll a big one then scatter my ashes in the stream behind my natural springs that go to my aunts property behind me where I use to roam free as a child. They want allow anyone on it now. If they scaterr my ashes in the stream then I can roam free back there.
Great writing!
Hang tuff, luv, huggs,
emy
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Re: free falling
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by Kie on
Friday, 27th February 2004 @ 08:54:59 PM AEST
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| Nessa you are one of my favorites on this site. I know when I read your poetry every single time you are going to touch me. That is a gift. Even in your darkest hour you are gifted with the magic to make poems come alive. I wish I could give you a hug, I would. If you ever need someone, let me know anytime. Okay? Loved your poem. Kie |
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Re: free falling
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by jaeann on
Friday, 27th February 2004 @ 09:20:37 PM AEST
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| it's amazing how our pain and desolation can just transform itself within our words........you convey this so well........death is a season without end.......yes my dear...... |
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Re: free falling
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by Cynthia on
Friday, 27th February 2004 @ 10:39:38 PM AEST
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| Nessa, my dear frined, this is a wonderful write. It's beautiful. *S* Cynthia |
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Re: free falling
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by blueheart on
Saturday, 28th February 2004 @ 01:35:38 AM AEST
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| Such an amazing poem. I'm speechless. :) |
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Re: free falling
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by Stalkee on
Saturday, 28th February 2004 @ 02:21:28 AM AEST
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| breath taking...beautiful...awesome |
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Re: free falling
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by shelby on
Saturday, 28th February 2004 @ 01:24:40 PM AEST
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Oh Nessa this moved me to tears Im worried about you please write me.
michelle |
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Re: free falling
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 1st March 2004 @ 02:52:45 PM AEST
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That was really amazing Nessa!
I'm sorry I don't get to read your stuff more often, but when I do it's always fantastic.
So emotive and so well expressed.
MZ |
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Re: free falling
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 5th March 2004 @ 09:55:27 AM AEST
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You seem so resigned, like your giving up, this is a sad poem, almost peaceful like, it is a good one,
Mary |
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Re: free falling
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by Soulless on
Friday, 26th March 2004 @ 10:54:04 PM AEST
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I like this poem. The title caught my attention. Its so tragic.
Beautiful write.
Kisses,
~Soulless~ |
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Re: free falling
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 3rd February 2014 @ 07:37:03 PM AEST
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Goodness, gracious, now that is poetry.
It is true, once you're gone not much else matters any more but life here will go on. Sad, yet beautifully written.
I'd suggest correcting some spelling though.
dimension
sunsets
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