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Falling
Contributed by
kori31
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Friday, 27th February 2004 @ 11:42:05 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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I'm falling way too fast
as fragments of me scatter
you might try and catch a few
but it doesn't even matter
my realities too far off
from what's really going on
cause my eyes can't see the truth
through a million tears of proof
of how things used to be
when all the pieces fit
and the view was much more clear
now most of me is gone
left with only grief and fear
some parts I gave away
like love and honesty
but most were ripped from me
without a hint of decency
you saw me broken down
a lonely victim of theft
slowly made your way inside
and took what little I had left
so don't try and put me back together
you can't fill the gaping cracks
I've lost too many pieces
I know I'll never get back
Copyright ©
kori31
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2004-02-27 23:42:05]
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Re: Falling
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by lil_angel on
Saturday, 28th February 2004 @ 12:03:49 AM AEST
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| I really like this poem you have agreat talent that will take you places! |
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Re: Falling
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 28th February 2004 @ 12:06:20 AM AEST
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| you should read Nine Inch Nails lyrics to Down In It on his cd Pretty Hate Machine, there's also Evanescence's song Going Under. I know how you feel. It's the same way I feel. |
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Re: Falling
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by Baronhawk on
Saturday, 28th February 2004 @ 01:35:18 PM AEST
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| A shattering experience indeed. I can relate to this...anyway..nice work..reading this is like falling down and crashing on a VERY hard surface...the feel is absolutely there...you have transferred well this array of emotions to us readers. |
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Re: Falling
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by PumpkinPie on
Monday, 22nd March 2004 @ 08:02:43 PM AEST
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Kori, this was very well written,beautifully expressed,I must say this powerful write was my favorite one from you :)
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Re: Falling
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by PumpkinPie on
Monday, 22nd March 2004 @ 08:03:41 PM AEST
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Kori, this was very well written,beautifully expressed,I must say this powerful write was my favorite one from you :)
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Re: Falling
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by Living_In_My_Dream on
Saturday, 5th June 2004 @ 12:07:39 AM AEST
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I really like this...you are a good writer and as said....it will take you places...keep it up, and keep it coming...thanks for the comment on mine...
Dani |
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