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tea and sympathy
Contributed by
ladyfawn
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Thursday, 4th March 2004 @ 12:13:43 AM in AEST
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he sits thinking of her now so far away
her smiling sweetly as she danced that day,
then as their love began to fade
she placed his heart on her tender blade,
this memory of her captures him
his mind now gets the best of him,
why did she have to hurt him so
for his torn heart she has no woe,
yet he wishes for her a happy life
while tears and tea he sips in strife,
his wounded heart is bleeding out
as silence screams unearthly shouts,
yet still his dreams she does invade
he'd thought forever truelove was made,
but lifetime kisses weren't meant to be
she blows them no more; of him she's free,
for all that was; to her but a shame
wasted time; but he'll never be the same,
he feels alone; his heart will never mend
what hurts even more is he knows it's his end,
will his mood pass? could life go on?
she has found another; sings a new song,
deeper in his heart; her blade it turns
he calls to death; 'bring on the worms',
he hears her voice within his mind
her parting words were so unkind,
he repeatedly says, 'you were mine'
when life was sunny and love had rhyme,
and even though she caused this pain
she would rather be walking in the rain,
besides her sweethearts now quite bore her
so simple they; they all adore her,
she never once had a thought to save him
knowing her wicked blade will end him soon,
shortly another new love is coming for tea
last night a long one; she's no time for sympathy,
at last their sweet love a distant memory
whilst he dies alone from her deadly blade,
her uncaring heart holds no pity as he lies dying
as she whispers over her tea to a new lover smiling.
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Re: tea and sympathy
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by blueheart on
Thursday, 4th March 2004 @ 12:21:26 AM AEST
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| Its a pity but there are such people in the world. Great poem, directs our thoughts to such things. |
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Re: tea and sympathy
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by twinkletoes on
Thursday, 4th March 2004 @ 12:34:19 AM AEST
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Yet each man kills the thing he loves,
By each let this be heard,
Some do it with a bitter look,
Some with a flattering word,
The coward does it with a kiss,
The brave man with a sword!
OSCAR WILDE
Nice guys come last....damn!
tt |
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Re: tea and sympathy
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by Stalkee on
Thursday, 4th March 2004 @ 12:44:22 AM AEST
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| I can see myself in this poem...tis a shame some women are like that...good job |
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Re: tea and sympathy
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by loveisendless on
Thursday, 4th March 2004 @ 01:08:45 AM AEST
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A DEADLY DRAMA! THAT HAS A NICE TUNE TO IT!! WRITTEN VERY WELL!!!
DAN!!!! |
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Re: tea and sympathy
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by venkat on
Thursday, 4th March 2004 @ 01:21:01 AM AEST
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It is powerfully woven..very deeply touching..
love and hugs my friend..
venkat |
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Re: tea and sympathy
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by Bongo on
Thursday, 4th March 2004 @ 02:15:02 AM AEST
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It didn't take long
To turn to another
Memories so sweet
Now just sunk deep
With all possibilities dead
Must walk straight ahead
But with bloody blade protruding
Will take time for the healing
A great write with vivid message Ness. |
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Re: tea and sympathy
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by shelby on
Thursday, 4th March 2004 @ 02:19:57 AM AEST
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intense and so very moving and deep
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Re: tea and sympathy
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 4th March 2004 @ 02:27:49 AM AEST
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bongo phil you have no clue
i write no longer about you
but you don't see it yet again
a knight's tale here within'
ciao sook
~nessa |
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Re: tea and sympathy
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 4th March 2004 @ 09:02:43 AM AEST
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I have read this over and over this morning Nessa. Torn between crying and laughing at myself for being such a fool. What is deadly real to some is no more than a fantasy to others and there will always be a part of my heart that wonders why it had to end the way it did. No matter.....what is done is done, I wish her happiness and laughter. It is because of the caring and love of people like you that I got through it. The dreams are less frequent, the pain dulls, but the memories..lol....those damn memories.
Roses at your feet |
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by arden on
Thursday, 4th March 2004 @ 10:44:17 AM AEST
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oh i love this so much! i loved how you made the whole thing flow it was amazing! wow! great job!
Arden |
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by forever_lonely on
Thursday, 4th March 2004 @ 12:27:22 PM AEST
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Its a shame some women are like this, and some men also, but it is nice to see someone fighting on the side of the men in this world that think with their heart more than their head, a beautiful write nessa imagery left me painting a picture of my own, the structure was perfect, rhythm was flowing, perfect.
Luke xx |
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Re: tea and sympathy
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by Kie on
Thursday, 4th March 2004 @ 02:28:46 PM AEST
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| So much to say about your poem. First and foremost it is yet another masterpiece. You know I cannot understand people (be it women or men) who do such atrocious things to someones heart. It is so cruel and unneeded. Maybe it is because I have been on the recieving end that I know how badly it hurts. I can't imagine ever putting someone thru this. You have made a valid & great point. Love the way your mind works Nessa. Kie |
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by WorthlesSanity666 on
Thursday, 4th March 2004 @ 05:46:20 PM AEST
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| I hope this didn't happen to you... Wonderful poem. I have just ended a relationship & feel a little similarly, this really helped. You have a marvelous talent, keep it up! |
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 4th March 2004 @ 05:54:19 PM AEST
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Devastatingly beautiuful, Nessa.
Rita |
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by emystar on
Friday, 5th March 2004 @ 06:50:06 AM AEST
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U go girl!
This is an awesome write!
luv, huggs,
emy |
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 5th March 2004 @ 10:28:21 AM AEST
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What a neat poem!
It is like a storybook!
Mary |
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 5th March 2004 @ 05:40:18 PM AEST
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And there's me always B**ching about men when I know women can be just as cruel and callus...oh well...men are still d**ks
Great work writing this hun, its true and wonderfully written, you really are an angel of poetry :o)
Huge love and hugs
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Re: tea and sympathy
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by Merry on
Friday, 5th March 2004 @ 06:03:34 PM AEST
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what a beautiful poem nessa - written with such understanding and compassion.
hugs
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Re: tea and sympathy
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by Lone_er on
Saturday, 6th March 2004 @ 11:55:03 AM AEST
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| Never read a more powerful or better written work maam.. Mesmerizing in it's tempo and beauty....Russ |
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