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Fall
Contributed by
EternitysLyre
on
Saturday, 6th March 2004 @ 10:55:11 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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The leaves blew all colors of the summer away
Greener than life and vivacious as day
When perusing the branch a russet blade strays
The crisp sound of footsteps on the sweet autumn fray
Sprouting in hopefulness, the fresh life had grown
Nourished and nurtured by the roots amidst stones
Many had toiled to conspire its home
And lavish it kindly in an affable loan
Development quickened as days wash through rain
When water was gentle and dripped away stains
The winds loving whispers made caressing embrace
The leaf tingled in luster and rustled, displaced
Bourgeoning burden and the evening so silver
The cool of the splendor and the moonlight so tender
Bathed in the darkness with ethereal gilder
In starlight the glistning of dew drops surrender
Minutes drifted through seconds of air
The nights trebled and flew between silver and glare
Filled with reverie the little leaf found
The lights all around aged from emerald to brown
From verdigris to golden tan
A timeless trance of bold and bland
Humming through their numbered eves
Their seconds precious, dawn bereaves
One leaf remained firmly tached to its branch
Unimaginably green in the sunlight so blanched
Though silver and sundrops the visions enchant
No tinge of regression could they hitherto plant
The winds screeched in scorn, cold nipping the verdant
Belligerent snow told futile insurgence
The server of life and its renegade servant
Once prudence and folly made a leafy convergence
The last blink of fall
In an untimely fall
And a gale toward the vagabond sleigh
When the crumpled one dyed
In a color it died
And no autumn could so heavily weigh
And the leaves blew all colors of summer away
Fleeting as life and elusive as day
When perusing the branch a russet blade strays
Drifting down to the sidewalk in ephemeral May
The crisp sound of footsteps on the sweet autumn fray-
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EternitysLyre
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2004-03-06 22:55:11]
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Re: Fall
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 6th March 2004 @ 11:25:47 PM AEST
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Your use of color is magnificent and your imagery the best. This is an amazing piece of work. I truly enjoyed this.
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Re: Fall
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by Stalkee on
Sunday, 7th March 2004 @ 12:47:35 AM AEST
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| magnificent poem! i liked this a lot, great job |
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Re: Fall
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by DreamWeaver on
Sunday, 7th March 2004 @ 03:14:41 AM AEST
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| I have read this a number of times .. the topic I loved, your words are beyond compare ... I really liked the difference in rhyming schemes at the end ... and your repeat of the last line which is a beautiful line ... dare I say "great write" ... I know how that seems like a cliche ... but still, great write ... Jan |
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Re: Fall
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 7th March 2004 @ 06:06:08 AM AEST
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Amazing imagery second to none, excellent write.
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Re: Fall
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 7th March 2004 @ 11:44:24 AM AEST
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Oh yes - I'm impressed,
A few lines didn't make sense to me at first, but I read it over and they clicked (kinda - Humming through a time/lifespan?). Good use of vivid color and rhyme ensures that I'll probably use this for some benchmark or another . . . ;o) |
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Re: Fall
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by Stitch on
Monday, 8th March 2004 @ 09:57:00 AM AEST
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Color, imagery, flow congealed beautifully into one.
Stitch |
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