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Fail or pass
Contributed by
broken-glass
on
Tuesday, 9th March 2004 @ 01:36:57 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Open. Shut. Innocent. ****. Dirty. Clean. Live in a dream. Born. Die. Laugh. Cry. Slow. Fast. Fail. Pass. Nothing matters, my dream shatters... You're open, never shut, you act innocent, you're just a ****. You act dirty, pretend you're clean, Why choose reality, when you can choose you're dreams? You're born, you die, you laugh, you cry, lifes slow, lifes fast, we fail we pass. But then I find(its in my mind) but then I hear, that nothing matters, my stupid dream, slowly shatters. Heres the question: does it end? Heres the answer... it never ends.
Say again???
Open. Shut. Innocent. ****. Dirty. Clean. Live in a dream. Born. Die. Laugh. Cry. Slow. Fast. Fail. Pass. Nothing matters, my dream shatters... You're open, never shut, you act innocent, you're just a ****. You act dirty, pretend you're clean, Why choose reality, when you can choose you're dreams? You're born, you die, you laugh, you cry, lifes slow, lifes fast, we fail we pass. But then I find(its in my mind) but then I hear, that nothing matters, my stupid dream, slowly shatters. Heres the question: does it end? Heres the answer... it never ends.
I get it this time.
It never ends.
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broken-glass
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Re: Fail or pass
(User Rating: 0 ) by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 9th March 2004 @ 01:45:10 PM AEST (User
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Nice poem, very good rythm (if thats how to spell it) ummm yeah, keep up the good work. And it does end and you pick when it ends nobody makes you sit infornt of the desk or behind the wheel just get up, walk away and stand in the middle of a busy road in the middle of a stormy night wearing black. |
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Re: Fail or pass
(User Rating: 1 ) by LornyaNarFuinenya on
Tuesday, 9th March 2004 @ 01:49:54 PM AEST (User
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that was neat, i really got lost in the it never ends....but my brain is too small for all o' that, nice job though ;) |
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Re: Fail or pass
(User Rating: 1 ) by Kellros on
Tuesday, 9th March 2004 @ 02:13:02 PM AEST (User
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Fast pace & thrilling, good job, i'd say more, but then i'd run out of words and have to stop |
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Re: Fail or pass
(User Rating: 1 ) by dolly_dagger on
Friday, 26th March 2004 @ 07:11:45 PM AEST (User
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for some reason this poem has evoked some sorta weird inspirational passion for something that i dont know what it is. but i relate, so thank u 4 doing a carol ann duffy and giving voice
xxxxxxxxxxxxx mwah love u 2 bits |
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