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my Dreams
Contributed by
angelface
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Tuesday, 9th March 2004 @ 02:52:38 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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every moment is spent in dreams
now, for me, life only means
that since i was in your arms
I have dwelt among the stars
shadows fly across the night
cast away by the loving sight
of you smiling in the light
on the day
you went away
in my dreams,
now,
to my chest, my quilt I clutch
in my sleep, I want so much
for you to hold me one more
with no clear end
no tomorrow, no good-byes
no more lonely, aching sighs
only a hope
to find a place
where I belong
in the heart of your love song
sing until we watch the dawn
side by side
in sweet dreams
because the only part of life that's real
is the way you made me feel
that only part (my heart)
longs to kiss you still (and will
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angelface
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2004-03-09 14:52:38]
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Re: my Dreams
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by arden on
Tuesday, 9th March 2004 @ 02:59:38 PM AEST
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aww i love this! its so good! wow wonderfully written. you have a nice talent.
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Re: my Dreams
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 9th March 2004 @ 04:11:40 PM AEST
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| Apart from the odd annoying typo (it annoys me much more when I miss mine), you have quite a very pretty poem here. I agree with arden's assertion that you have talent - for you convey genuine emotion and desire through your words - and that's why I'm going to now go and check out the rest of your poems. |
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Re: my Dreams
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by Whisper on
Tuesday, 9th March 2004 @ 10:26:31 PM AEST
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The only suggestion to your pros would be to begin the last paragraph with the lines:
Because the only part of life that"s real
Is the way you made me feel.
In Sweet dreams,side by side, we sing until we watch the dawn
And My heart longs to kiss you still .
Whisper
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Re: my Dreams
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by desire on
Thursday, 11th March 2004 @ 11:42:20 PM AEST
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| this is a good write i love the imagination thing you got going...great jog...slr |
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