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Abe's Oddysee
Contributed by
AliB
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Wednesday, 10th March 2004 @ 06:21:04 PM in AEST
Topic:
fantasy
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Off he goes on an epic quest
Saving his peers at his best
Chanting those sligs off his chest
One slig...two slig....and the rest
Run like hell they're on your tail
Jump that ledge try not to bail
Follow that paramite trail
If you trip you'll fall like hail
If you get through rupture farms
You'll be led into the dark
Only the fireflies lead the path
After this you'll need a bath
As you jump the leap of faith
The world slows down, you take a break
You're almost out of the wild without a trace
And then you realise the jump you jumped, you make
The vicious scrabs, the gullible paramites
And then there's elm, the leg cock in flight
He can take you to incredible heights
You never know, he may even save your life
Beautifuls scenes, wicked views
Yes my mate there's quite a few
The enormous heights, you may want to spew
But that is what he has to do
Dodging bats, boulders, bombs
He only wants to get along
But they won't be alive for long
'Cause he will make them bloody gone
Now you'll wonder where all this fame
Has come from in this terrific game
Do you really want to know his name
Well my friend, his name is ABE!
Copyright ©
AliB
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2004-03-10 18:21:04]
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Re: Abe's Oddysee
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 10th March 2004 @ 06:33:20 PM AEST
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Talented is an understatement, your son has a gift for poetry, no late nights out with the girls! straight to the writing desk for that boy!
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Re: Abe's Oddysee
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by ladyfawn on
Wednesday, 10th March 2004 @ 06:40:37 PM AEST
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thanx for posting ali, this is how my son started too, to your son:
keep writing hon, you show much talent, this is delightful, i very much look forward to reading more from you, please open your own account and let me know when you do:) hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Abe's Oddysee
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 10th March 2004 @ 08:50:59 PM AEST
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I cannot believe you are only 14. Talent is a definite understatement here. Don't give up for you will only get better and better. It is true, practice makes perfect and you don't have far to go.
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Re: Abe's Oddysee
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by Dawny on
Thursday, 11th March 2004 @ 12:46:31 PM AEST
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Hi Daniel
Well Im speechless!! I love this game, and you have really bought it to life. Your descriptions are excellent, as is your rhyming. You can just imagine you are Abe!!
Keep writing, and I agree you should open your own account. Let me know when you do.
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Re: Abe's Oddysee
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by venkat on
Friday, 12th March 2004 @ 07:31:48 AM AEST
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wow..you have written a nice poem...Good luck..continue dear boy..
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