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damn me
Contributed by
loopylou
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Sunday, 14th March 2004 @ 02:37:24 PM in AEST
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you're teaching me
i'm listening so hard
i'm trying my best
effort coming from my heart
i never wanted to be me
i never wanted this disease that is riddling me
i wish you understood
how hard it is
just to go to class
i wish you understood the courage it takes to ask
i take a risk everyday
i try so hard
knowing ill forget it anyway
people probably think im lazy and dumb
but i fight every day just to be somone
now the future looks so bleak for me
so many ties cut from one disabilty
when did i become so isolated
when did i walk alone
this is my first complaint
i tried so damn hard not to moan
but like everything else
somehow i messed that up
i guess all my effort yet again wasn't enought
so maybe ill just let myself roll downhill
and not stop the tears that im so tempted to spill
there's no hope no more
no shooting stars
just one stupid girl with
one cut up heart
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Re: damn me
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by liquidsunshine on
Sunday, 14th March 2004 @ 02:55:57 PM AEST
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It kind of hurt to read the last two lines "Just one stupid girl with one cut up heart"... I don't see that here. I see a brilliant mind, but hindered and frustrated and held back by your disease. I realize this poem was written during a time of frustration, but all this comment is meant to do is to give you a little peace and solace.
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Re: damn me
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Sunday, 14th March 2004 @ 02:56:35 PM AEST
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OMG...this is so touching...I cannot begin to imagine what you're going thru..I'm so sorry... I wish you the very best... just remember... DON'T EVER GIVE UP...
Hugs
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Re: damn me
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by Lessa on
Sunday, 14th March 2004 @ 03:05:56 PM AEST
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| this is a really touching write, dont give up hun, your ganna do great |
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Re: damn me
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by ShadowDaughter on
Sunday, 14th March 2004 @ 03:20:22 PM AEST
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Wow. VERY impressive. Powerful . . .
--Nora |
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Re: damn me
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by RICHARD_CAMPBELL on
Sunday, 14th March 2004 @ 04:12:34 PM AEST
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Hi loopylou,
your heart can be put back together
if you believe in our savior.all it takes is faith.
we all go through changes,but we make it out.
don't give up,peace will come.i will be praying for you.
this is a very good write. |
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Re: damn me
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by Kindredblood_dragon on
Sunday, 14th March 2004 @ 04:28:07 PM AEST
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Such sadness, I feel for your pain, you have such beautitful talent, it shows with in your words, how the flow, it even sounds like a song.
And you say you are a stupid girl?
From what I read from this poem how draws the eyes and holds the reader, well I'd say you are not stupid if you can write this dam good!!!!!!
Take heart from these words you have a wonderful gift for poetry, and that coms from a beautiful mind.
Keep it up I truely enjoyed this poem.
Take care. |
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Re: damn me
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by lilch4ever on
Monday, 15th March 2004 @ 12:37:27 AM AEST
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| That was a good poem and sad. Hope things get better. Have a nice day :) |
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Re: damn me
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by ladyfawn on
Tuesday, 16th March 2004 @ 08:21:45 PM AEST
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| dispraxia i am not familiar with, but my daughter is dyslexic, she didnt speak until she was 3yrs old (now however she never shuts up lol) when she was 19 months old the doctors said she would never read or write, she has proven them wrong, you can ace it too, i know it and believe in you, you have so much potential, your soul shines, im here if you want to talk, and im curious about what the dispraxia is, your poem is very heartfelt and wonderfully written:) hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: damn me
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by apollo on
Saturday, 22nd May 2004 @ 10:25:45 AM AEST
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| i for sure do not think you are lazy and dumb, i hope others do not either. i think your writing is so pure and it really expresses your feelings so well. we all have things about ourselves that we wish we may or did not have, but those are the things which make us unique and beautiful. |
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