|
 Menu
|
|
|
|
|
Social
|
|
|
|
|
Abe's Oddysee
Contributed by
Dan666
on
Monday, 15th March 2004 @ 02:33:36 PM in AEST
Topic:
fantasy
|
Abe's Oddysee
Off he goes on an epic quest,
Saving his peers at his best,
Chanting those sligs off his chest,
One slig..... two slig..... and the rest.
Run like hell they're on your trail,
Jump that ledge try not to bail,
Follow that paramite trail,
If you trip you'll fall like hail.
If you get through Rupture farms,
You'll be led into the dark,
Only the fireflies lead the path,
After this you'll need a bath.
As you jump the leap of faith,
The world slows down you take a break,
You're almost out of the wild without a trace,
And then you realise the jump you jumped, you make.
The vicious scrabs, the gullible paramites,
And then there's Elm, the leg cock in flight,
He can take you to incredible heights,
You never know, he may even save your life.
Beautiful scenes, wicked views,
Yes my mate there's quite a few,
The enormous heights, you may want to spew,
But that is what he has to do.
Dodging bats, boulders, bombs,
He only wants to get along,
But they won't be alive for long,
Coz he will make them bloody gone.
Now you'll wonder where all this fame,
Has come from in this terrific game,
Do you really want to know his name?
Well my friend, his name is...........Abe!
Copyright ©
Dan666
... [
2004-03-15 14:33:36]
(Date/Time posted on
site)
Advertisments:
|
|
|
|
|
|
Sorry, comments are no longer allowed for anonymous, please register for a free membership to access this feature and more
|
|
All comments are owned by the poster. Your Poetry
Dot Com is not responsible for the content of any
comment.
That said, if you find an offensive comment, please
contact via the FeedBack Form with details, including poem title
etc.
|
|
|
Re: Abe's Oddysee
(User Rating: 1 )
by Dawny on
Saturday, 3rd April 2004 @ 03:30:36 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Hi Daniel
(Pasted this from your Mums account)
Well Im speechless!! I love this game, and you have really bought it to life. Your descriptions are excellent, as is your rhyming. You can just imagine you are Abe!!
Keep writing, and I agree you should open your own account. Let me know when you do.
Love Dawny x
|
|
|
Re: Abe's Oddysee
(User Rating: 1 )
by ladyfawn on
Sunday, 1st August 2004 @ 11:51:46 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
ooooh i used to play that game! lol, i love abe:) now i only play sims:P ...your talent really shines in this, great style and laid out well:) hugs n' love nessa
@->>->:- |
|
|
Re: Abe's Oddysee
(User Rating: 1 )
by Dan666 on
Wednesday, 24th November 2004 @ 08:26:25 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Re: Abe's Oddysee (User Rating: 1)
by wildeJohnny on Wednesday, March 10 2004 @ 18:33:20 CST
(User Info | Send a Message)
Talented is an understatement, your son has a gift for poetry, no late nights out with the girls! straight to the writing desk for that boy!
wildejohnny.
( pasted from mums account Alib ) |
|
|
Re: Abe's Oddysee
(User Rating: 1 )
by Dan666 on
Wednesday, 24th November 2004 @ 08:28:00 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Re: Abe's Oddysee (User Rating: 1)
by ladyfawn (PrissyMulligan@hotmail.com) on Wednesday, March 10 2004 @ 18:40:37 CST
(User Info | Send a Message) http://www.your-poetry.com/modules.php?name=Your_Account&op=userinfo&username=ladyfawn
thanx for posting ali, this is how my son started too, to your son:
keep writing hon, you show much talent, this is delightful, i very much look forward to reading more from you, please open your own account and let me know when you do:) hugs n' love nessa
@->>->-
( pasted from mums account alib ) |
|
|
Re: Abe's Oddysee
(User Rating: 1 )
by Dan666 on
Wednesday, 24th November 2004 @ 08:29:15 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Re: Abe's Oddysee (User Rating: 1)
by RITA on Wednesday, March 10 2004 @ 20:50:59 CST
(User Info | Send a Message)
I cannot believe you are only 14. Talent is a definite understatement here. Don't give up for you will only get better and better. It is true, practice makes perfect and you don't have far to go.
Rita
( pasted from mums account alib ) |
|
|
Re: Abe's Oddysee
(User Rating: 1 )
by Dan666 on
Wednesday, 24th November 2004 @ 08:30:49 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Re: Abe's Oddysee (User Rating: 1)
by venkat on Friday, March 12 2004 @ 07:31:48 CST
(User Info | Send a Message)
wow..you have written a nice poem...Good luck..continue dear boy..
venkat
( pasted from mums account alib ) |
|
|
|
· 
Poetry
Community
Members
Areas
Reference
Search
Top
Others
