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Untitled
Contributed by
crimsondream
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Tuesday, 16th March 2004 @ 03:44:37 PM in AEST
Topic:
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i hate this world
everything is wrong
the pain
the hurt
why cant i just go?
go home...
if there is a home
i hate being alone
theres nowhere to turn
from fears
from glares
why cant we rely?
rely on eachother...
or is that what we want
i hate pretending
being told how to act
pasted smiles
fake laughs
why must we hide?
hide our true selves...
but this is what we are now
i hate the world
everything is wrong
the anger
the violence
why cant we find peace?
peace and love...
we're all just too stubborn
to think that we might
be part of the problem...
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crimsondream
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2004-03-16 15:44:37]
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Re: Untitled
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by kidpoet_213 on
Tuesday, 16th March 2004 @ 03:59:18 PM AEST
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Well written... if I may suggest a title.... call it very simply...."Why?" Since u have all the why questions posed in it...
Keep writing, this is very good... makes u think...
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Re: Untitled
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by shelby on
Tuesday, 16th March 2004 @ 05:20:48 PM AEST
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I liked this! Why is a good title or Change maybe because Im seeing that you would like to see things going on different than what they are right now.
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Re: Untitled
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by laststarontheleft on
Saturday, 19th December 2009 @ 06:44:02 AM AEST
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What a great poem.
Full of emotion and questioning of people's existence
Star x x x |
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