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Sky Fall
Contributed by
EternitysLyre
on
Sunday, 21st March 2004 @ 06:41:28 AM in AEST
Topic:
Nostalgic
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A weave of feathrey patchwork that cascades across the skies
Where memries make tomorrow and the sunlight takes disguise
When oceans waltz in sapphire steps and the winged hope still flies
And no one understands a word the lost breeze still implies
A gentle run bequeathed in sun through brilliant rays reverse
Where skies dye gold in time foretold and raindrops all disperse
The silent song where joy belongs in timeless words traverse
And woe is but a singsong line in shimmring rainbow verse
Drifting high beyond despair, sinking down below nights stare
The tender kiss of white on air, a fleeting wisp that soothes the glare
Enticing minds in fragrant care, nocturnal roses drunk on prayer
Omnipresent yet still so rare, when happiness still frolicked bare
The perfect night of dazzling right and frivolous monsoons
Whence shadows prance star-stuck romance and twinkle childrens June
The wishes carried on by drafts and evening gone too soon
When clouds aligned in silver steps the stairway to the moon
A waft of night intoxicates depression through the gloom
Aloft delight reciprocates regressions of the loom
Where winking jewels beset the sky and death is in full bloom
Finesse redresses midnight heir and life becomes the tomb
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EternitysLyre
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2004-03-21 06:41:28]
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Re: Sky Fall
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by Vitreous_Soul on
Sunday, 21st March 2004 @ 07:14:08 AM AEST
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I'm not sure what's more staggering---your command of rhyme, meter, and vocabulary...or how perfectly you employ them into incredible poetry such as this. This has everything in place, and that professional touch and polish that i've come to expect (and respect) from you. Magnificently written.
Truly,
-V.S. |
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Re: Sky Fall
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 21st March 2004 @ 09:08:46 AM AEST
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Cryptic, yet rapturous.
The 2nd line, 4rth stanza was particularly impressive . . .
"Whence shadows prance star-stuck romance and twinkle children’s June"
A lesson in rhyme and structure I will pay heed to...
Thanks for sharing. |
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Re: Sky Fall
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by Necromant on
Sunday, 21st March 2004 @ 09:34:33 AM AEST
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Wow wonderful poem! Wonderfully written it left me speechless! A true master piece! Brilliant write!
Anne :D |
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Re: Sky Fall
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by Daniela_Maria_Violin on
Sunday, 21st March 2004 @ 12:18:22 PM AEST
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Wow.....you should publish this... I have no doubt it would render you deserving to be among the greats. ;)
Awesome!
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