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Playing with words....
Contributed by
Aika
on
Sunday, 21st March 2004 @ 11:41:34 AM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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With words I am playing
In rhymes writing feelings
And under my eyelids
Rolling down the tears
I am playing with words
But what is with you happening
in the candle shadow
I dont wanna play hide and seek
Now putting my puzzle together
I think I have enough of them
In that picture I see vision
That in your heart I was only guest
Instead of sorrow
I light antoher candles
Being sure that nomore
Your heart I enter
Just like river flows
And has its stream
Also your heart
Needs to flow freely
Hraju si tu se slovčky
Ve verch pu city
Zatm se mi za včky
Slzy skutlely
Hraju si tu se slovčky
Ale co je s tebou
Nebav mě v stnu svčky
Hrt na schovvanou
Ted si zase skldm puzzle
Myslm, e jich u mm dost
V obrzku sloila se vize
e v tvm srdci byla jsem host
Snad msto alu raději
Zahnu nov svce
Jista si, e nikdy u
Nevstoupm do tvho srdce
I řeka teče,
M svůj proud
i srdce tvoje
tou volně plout
Copyright ©
Aika
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2004-03-21 11:41:34]
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Re: Playing with words....
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by Necromant on
Sunday, 21st March 2004 @ 11:57:27 AM AEST
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What a wonderful sad expressive poem! Its really teary. Great write!
Anne :D |
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Re: Playing with words....
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by Sexygirl on
Sunday, 21st March 2004 @ 12:27:02 PM AEST
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| Playing with words...thix is well writen... |
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Re: Playing with words....
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by Ilhar on
Sunday, 21st March 2004 @ 12:47:16 PM AEST
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well written but oh so sad
shari |
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Re: Playing with words....
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by ThePumpkinKing on
Sunday, 21st March 2004 @ 02:49:12 PM AEST
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| so sad indeed....great write though, i enjoyed it immensely (oooo, big word) =) |
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Re: Playing with words....
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by luckycharm on
Sunday, 21st March 2004 @ 04:35:18 PM AEST
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| Your poem was good. What does the ending mean?.-luckycharm. |
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Re: Playing with words....
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by LOWMAN613 on
Monday, 22nd March 2004 @ 12:38:09 AM AEST
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| Sad but well written,enjoyed the read! Christina |
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Re: Playing with words....
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by lovingcritters on
Tuesday, 23rd March 2004 @ 05:36:55 PM AEST
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Beautiful Aika,
Now I see how you wanted to use puzzle.
You used it right dear.
And this poem was endearing sad!
Wonderful way with words
love you
consue |
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Re: Playing with words....
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by Puppy_dog_eyes on
Friday, 7th May 2004 @ 11:43:28 AM AEST
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I agree with the others, a sad but moving poem.
I sense the pain of giving someone up, someone more dear to you than you were to them perhaps, that is my interpretation. |
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