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Luminescent Architect
Contributed by
Vitreous_Soul
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Friday, 26th March 2004 @ 06:30:34 AM in AEST
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In cirrus clad to bring creation
Silhouettes in delineation
Born not of man, lunar artisan
Showers the land in sublimation
Spectrum as palette, an artist true
Sketches out a celestial view
Divine highlights, 'neath aura ignite
Diffraction paints a prismatic hue
'Cross barren plains, vivification
Through black and white, variegation
Bring life this field, which darkness concealed
Revive lost souls in transmigration
'Twixt welkin's vault and sapphire sky
Past lumined clouds pierces watchful eye
Rich iris bold, holds wisdom untold
What splendour would my vision descry
All traces drawn, now forged and outlined
By moonbeams' gleam, in each flair love shined
From glimm'ring seas, to verderous trees
Saintly masterpiece 'pon Earth enshrined
Work of art, forever to protect
Precious montage, crafted in cathect
Father smiled, on sacred child
Portrait cast by Heaven's architect
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Re: Luminescent Architect
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 26th March 2004 @ 06:54:49 AM AEST
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Wonderous use of language here, had me reaching for the old dictionary. I'm at a loss to pinpoint what exactly it was that the luminescent architect was creating "'pon Earth enshrined" but I'll re-read it over and over again 'till I find out . . .
"Divine highlights, 'neath aura ignite
Diffraction paints a prismatic hue"
One beautiful image portrayed from many original, inspiring perspectives, combined to convey something . . . so . . . ethereal?
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Re: Luminescent Architect
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 26th March 2004 @ 07:00:22 AM AEST
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Hmn. I'll take a stab at 'life itself' . . .? Seems to fit in my perception . . .
Again, splendorous work . . . |
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Re: Luminescent Architect
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by forever_lonely on
Friday, 26th March 2004 @ 07:00:33 AM AEST
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Dan this is inspirational, truely a jow beyond all measure, i mhave been searching for your writes amost everyday since your last one and i am not disappointed by any means this is an amazing piece my friend r and r is perfect as always but would i expect anthing less
''All traces drawn, now forged and outlined
By moonbeams' gleam, in each flair love shined
From glimm'ring seas, to verderous trees
Saintly masterpiece 'pon Earth enshrined''
I love that stanza left me in awe of a master
Luke
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Re: Luminescent Architect
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by blueheart on
Friday, 26th March 2004 @ 07:02:54 AM AEST
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| This poem is truly amazing. |
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Re: Luminescent Architect
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by venkat on
Friday, 26th March 2004 @ 07:32:49 AM AEST
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well thought, well portrayed..a thrilling vision of earth painted by the gleaming moon light..
its fine........venkat |
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Re: Luminescent Architect
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by EternitysLyre on
Friday, 26th March 2004 @ 08:29:10 AM AEST
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I hate you. And if you keep this up I'm going to start loving my dictionary. Just when I think you can get no better you make the impossible even more so. You and Neptunes first are moving beyond using merely difficult words to the point of making this a vocabulary lesson. I practically feel left behind because I don't have a vocabulary the size of a planet like you two.
So good it's not funny.
"A liar's smile makes great protection; in fulsome curls of genuflection."
~The Palatine Poet |
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Re: Luminescent Architect
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by Rakerman1999 on
Friday, 26th March 2004 @ 09:07:31 AM AEST
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What can I say, in fact, till I find my dictionary I cant say aything. lol
I'll say well done anyway cause I know it is simply because it came from your pen.
Larry |
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Re: Luminescent Architect
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by Avarice_Riot on
Friday, 26th March 2004 @ 10:35:18 AM AEST
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| ...holy crap. That's some pretty incredible (to put it the least) use of language and imagery. Like all the others, I need my dictionary for this. |
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Re: Luminescent Architect
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 26th March 2004 @ 01:08:46 PM AEST
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A beautifully vivid collage of life. This is truly my vision of the world around me and I do feel very blessed. Magnifient!
Rita |
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Re: Luminescent Architect
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by ladyfawn on
Friday, 26th March 2004 @ 02:31:19 PM AEST
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your writing is getting stronger everyday, this is very pretty:) hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Luminescent Architect
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by dolly_dagger on
Friday, 26th March 2004 @ 04:56:47 PM AEST
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how beauiful. i am totally inspired. incredibly well written. thank you SO much for sharing
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Re: Luminescent Architect
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by Eve on
Friday, 26th March 2004 @ 06:27:05 PM AEST
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Fortunately, I didn't need a dictionary, as I was instantly pulled into the poem like a paper clip to a massive magnet. What I did need was a pillow, be it to scream into it in rage at the level you went to in this that I'll never be able to achieve, or to pass out cold on from being entirely overwhelmed. I think I hate you. Yeah. This was the most reaction-wrenching poem I've ever read. I mean it.
And reading over it three more times... the rhyming scheme is amazing, and the entire thing is complex beyond all reason. This, my friend, is the epitome of amazing.
Keep writing or I kill you,
-Eve.
Ps- I don't hate you. But I want to! |
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Re: Luminescent Architect
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by ShadowDaughter on
Friday, 26th March 2004 @ 10:15:10 PM AEST
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I'm unsure whether to hate you, scream, and try to rip out your hair; or adore you, scream, and try to get your autograph.
Decisions, decisions . . .
But anyway, WOW. Color me impressed, Dan! I'd waste twenty minutes describing it but I'm terribly afraid I don't feel like it :-P. It would deserve every minute I spent on it, though, and since I'm THINKING it really hard and it's the thought that counts, it comes out to the same thing, right?
My compliments, Dan.
w/ affection and CEGHs,
Nora |
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Re: Luminescent Architect
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by DreamWeaver on
Friday, 26th March 2004 @ 11:02:54 PM AEST
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| Your talent never ceases to amaze me ... I enjoyed the different rhyme scheme in this, and the subject matter drew me in totally ... excellent write ... Jan |
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Re: Luminescent Architect
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by Kie on
Saturday, 27th March 2004 @ 01:22:05 AM AEST
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| Equals parts make up an incredible poem. You have out done yourself with this one. I thought it was beautiful beyond words. Glad to see you posting again. Kie |
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Re: Luminescent Architect
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by lovingcritters on
Saturday, 27th March 2004 @ 03:43:00 AM AEST
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VS this was splendid.......the last two lines did it all for me.
Father smiiled, on scared child
Portrait cast by Heaven's Architect!
Even without all the rest of the great worded write..........with just these two in sight
it would be sufficent for me!
Wondrous
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Re: Luminescent Architect
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by STRaNGe_LiNDSeY on
Saturday, 27th March 2004 @ 02:30:51 PM AEST
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| Now I knew you had to be an amazing poet to understand my jibberish BUT WOW. I'm speakless. That was a wonderous picture you painted for us. Thank you |
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Re: Luminescent Architect
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 28th March 2004 @ 08:11:59 PM AEST
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Of course, now my previous comments show how I'd read and commented on this half asleep . . . lol. Another read under the moonlight, brings the rune to life, like etched lines unto the Mines of Moria . . .
And yes, whilst describing a different vision to its eclipse, you have raised the bar here with something more expressive, detailed and effulgent, in my opinion. And of course, the part I picked out previous, stands out even further in its vivacity.
Again, I'm deeply impressed, and will continue to study this in order to fully appreciate it. |
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