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my suicide
Contributed by
whocares
on
Sunday, 28th March 2004 @ 02:47:05 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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I tried to show you how i feel.
I guess that i just couldnt deal.
Now im gone and you dont know why.
You should have known i wanted to die.
This pain is just too strong
Why is this happening to me?
I have done nothing wrong.
You were too blind to see
that deep down you were hurting me.
The walls you've put up and the castles you've built still could not have hidden your guilt.
I cried in my room up so high,
only you can make me want to die.
So now i sit with this gun in my hand.
My dying wish is of one demand.
Tell my father i love him so
and that i had never really wanted to go.
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whocares
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Re: my suicide
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 28th March 2004 @ 02:53:59 PM AEST
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Ive had similliar feelings,
I know now that I would never go through with it,
I hope you don't have to dwell on those feelings again.
good write |
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Re: my suicide
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by arden on
Sunday, 28th March 2004 @ 02:55:27 PM AEST
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oh this is so sad and very dark. deep stuff i like this alot. well done
Arden |
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Re: my suicide
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by deathdrop on
Sunday, 28th March 2004 @ 02:57:57 PM AEST
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year, i love this, it's soo good!
suicidalness hangs upon you like a curse and never lets you go really. but hang on until the point or let some one notice if you want out! |
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Re: my suicide
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by poet_of_anger on
Sunday, 28th March 2004 @ 03:08:03 PM AEST
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| Very well written, it would make for a great song. And for the first poem that you have ever written, this is very impressive, nice job. |
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Re: my suicide
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by ladyfawn on
Sunday, 28th March 2004 @ 03:08:17 PM AEST
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| beautiful expression of feelings, warm welcome to ypdc, hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: my suicide
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by MrWrite on
Sunday, 28th March 2004 @ 03:26:19 PM AEST
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| Wow. This was extremely well written, and the emotions you conveyed went straight to my heart. Well done, my friend. |
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Re: my suicide
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 28th March 2004 @ 03:37:16 PM AEST
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This would really be great for a song. I can just immagine it will the guitars and everything. Good work, Bella. It seemed to go through a lot of people's hearts. We can all relate...
-xxx- Rally |
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Re: my suicide
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by Mortis-Dark on
Sunday, 28th March 2004 @ 03:41:22 PM AEST
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I like how you knew how to put blind emotion into this piece. It carrys a rhythm and has more than moral meaning. Great Write !!!!
(V)ortis-Dark |
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Re: my suicide
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by Soulpoetry on
Monday, 5th April 2004 @ 04:43:58 PM AEST
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| Great Write!!!! |
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Re: my suicide
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 11th April 2004 @ 01:10:28 AM AEST
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This is a really great poem for being your first. I woulds like to see how all of your other poems end up like! Keep up the great work!!
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