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Driven
Contributed by
parkman
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Monday, 29th March 2004 @ 11:10:45 AM in AEST
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I'm coming, you piece of scum, there's no where you can hide
The hour glass is running out, time isn't on your side
I've been waiting patiently, for three years to the day
Now I'm going to get you and I will make you pay
Do you know how you destroyed me, when you killed my lovely wife
The courts showed much leniency, but you should have gotten life
Hit her with a speeding car, whilst in a drunken state
In one quick flash, forever more, changing our lifes fate
You should have known better, you had driven drunk before
Having avoided any conviction, you done it all the more
You think you were unlucky, to spend time in a cell
But the life you have left me with, is an ongoing living hell
So now I know the time has come, for me to put this right
Outside the bar, where you drink once more, I'm sitting late at night
Parked far behind your waiting car, that you intend to drive
Someone else you could kill, if you remain alive
Watching as you stagger, towards the drivers door
Starting up the engine, I put my foot down to the floor
You turn and see the headlights, as my car approaches you
This is it, your time has come, your driving days are through
Taking off my seatbelt, my speed increasing fast
Smashing you against our cars, my head hits off the glass
Your lifeless body upon my bonnet, I've witnessed your demise
Here I come my darling wife, ignited flames begin to rise
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2004-03-29 11:10:45]
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Re: Driven
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by Kie on
Monday, 29th March 2004 @ 09:32:44 PM AEST
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| Welcome to YPDC. My heart goes out to you in regards to this poem. Anger, pain so many things called out to me. Thank you for sharing this with us. |
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Re: Driven
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Tuesday, 30th March 2004 @ 08:43:55 PM AEST
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OMG!!! I hope this is fictional....if it isn't then my heart goes out to you...
Jenni |
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Re: Driven
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 20th April 2004 @ 02:07:16 PM AEST
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Of course, If i'd written something as good as this, and got so many reads, but so little comment, I'd be a little cheesed, to say the least. I don't know - perhaps they were struck dumb by the sheer excellence of this write. I don't see many who rhyme as good as this in here, and for your first submission, I'll assume you're of a high calibre. Let me take something from your poem to point out how good it was, on behalf of the 130-odd before me who couldn't be bothered.
"Do you know how you destroyed me, when you killed my lovely wife
The courts showed much leniency, but you should have gotten life"
Aha. That took me a while, as you seem to have written this with much aplomb, where I struggled to pick out one part which stood out - as this entire poem's outstanding!
By the way, I've written a poem about drunk driving. I'd be honoured if you'd take the time to a) find it and b) read it.
Laudably done. |
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